Love Gave Me Sight ... (soul breaths)

Love Gave Me Sight ... (soul breaths)

A Poem by Richard
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Sextets in a 9-count and ababab, cdcdcd, etc; rhyme-scheme.

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Love Gave Me Sight 


Thinking I was such a special man …

ne’er I'd had a single clear insight;

’til, like ocean’s wide majestic span,

her love made me see one summer's night.

'Neath waxed moon she formed a newborn plan …

my lonely soul, gifted wings for flight!


Memories poured out from in my heart …

deepest, darkest cleansings taking place.

Her love made me ache for a fresh start;

all pain swept aside through tender grace.

Olde love notions soon would fall apart,

to vapor ~ vanished with ne’er a trace.


New love made me gleam like sparkling gold,

melting and re-forming then as stars,

from the heavens shining where they’ve told

how love lases all deep, jagged scars.

Splendored rays of passion’s heat … behold!

Tomes of gold inscribing new memoirs!


Wrapped in aural flows two now reborn,

as though fate itself embraced each soul …

every fibre of their beings torn

from rent moorings, once again made whole.

Love made me and she ne’er more forlorn;

to each soul … renewed, all life had stole.


Sunrise-glimmers dance off rippling rills,

across life’s pond's joyous revelry …

by each warbling mockingbird’s bright trills,

sung each hearts’ effulgent melody.

As Nature’s verdant views sweep yon hills …

through new eyes ~ it’s Her, love made me see.



Richard W. Jenkins

           ©2017


© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Painting: Amoré by Andrew Gonzalez, acrylics on clayboard.

Please, feel free to leave helpful critique,
or anything you believe will help better my craft! : )

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A very nice piece written to share the excitement of two souls finding new love but I'm old school & still believe the best love is the deep abiding kind which is even more exciting. The deep lifelong love that has endured the test of time.

It would even be better if the new love you speak of is actually a rebirth of the same lifelong long love that once was.

Thanks for sharing your words along with the gorgeous visual.

Blessings,
~ mj

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Blessings warmly requited, Mary Jo.
Even old, enduring love can be renewed by a soft caress, .. read more
heavenscentgirl1

4 Months Ago

Your words are filled with truth Sir and I look forward to reading more of your shared pieces.



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nice poem. thanks for sharing your talent

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thanks for your lovely compliment, Roxane*
And, for selecting one of my humble pieces to read.. read more
All I can say at the moment is Oh. My. Gosh.

That was amazing.

Your 9-count was perfection until the last stanza:

"across life’s pond in joyous revelry …
each warbling mockingbird’s bright trills"

It still averages out to 9.

This is a beautiful poem, and a better wordsmith than me would be able to do it justice in this blue box.

You're a real poet.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

How wonderful, Karen,
You've selected a beautiful piece to begin a new relationship through o.. read more
"all pain swept aside through tender grace.
Olde love notions soon would fall apart,
to vapor vanished with ne’er a trace."

New, and real love has healing properties that can not be matched by any plant not extinct on our planet.

Artfully penned and the Olde English spelling with New English meaning gives it an "all eras" flavor.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

So beautifully expressed, Dear Carol,
Very wise and knowing, indeed, the soothing touches of .. read more
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your poem is already great. but this...is just, i mean c'mon : "anything you believe will help better my craft!" ...you have my full respect. i totally admire you. i meant your great talent! haha!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

After your review, LC,
I feel so very blessed, appreciated, and revered from such a lovely la.. read more
L.C. Jarrette

4 Months Ago

i don't know what to say...(still blushing) lol.
:D
Richard

4 Months Ago

I think you've said it very clearly, LC! ; )
YOU are a special man in so many ways Richard!

To find someone who opens our eyes to the wonders of love is a wonderful thing, as your words have done and I thank you for them Sir. Angel

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Angel,
You have such a blissful way of reaching out to touch, that travels to my c.. read more
Interesting rhyme scheme, holds each stanza nicely together, giving a feeling of wholeness. Love touches us in surprising ways and does make one feel 'whole'. So glad that, "love lases all deep, jagged scars", and, "renewed all life had stole." The last stanza is very moving, love giving the poet new eyes to see the lovely side of the natural world. And, as for HER, well, lucky Her!
I really enjoyed this beautiful poem.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Thank you sincerely, Dear Astri,
From you, such words of praise, enjoyment, appreciation, and.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

4 Months Ago

An olde bard has the great advantage of experience, from which to draw inspiration. And of course,ma.. read more
Richard

4 Months Ago

Most humbly and graciously, to You, a low, sweeping bow⁓*
The last stanza held me...

The last line of stanza 4 confused and paused me - I reread the entire stanza three times before moving on (and each time that last line felt off). The implied "it" before renewed seems to need a "that" before life.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Thanks for sharing your technical insights, Chris, and for letting me know that something about this.. read more
Chris

4 Months Ago

In keeping with your intent - "to each soul … renewed, all life had stole." - appears to best fulf.. read more
Richard

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Chris for your valuable and always welcome input … I shall make the adjustment immediat.. read more
Since my first breath, I believed in "The Power of Love", and believed that Love is a real Cure, till my last breath, and to the beyond lifes, I will keep holding this belief, though it won't be easy at all, but that's me, and what makes me "me".

Your words speak of that cure, of that eternal rebirthing, written indeed with Your soul breaths, melting with Your loved one soul breath, because the sheer serenity and sincerity are sparkling from Your page like the broken stars, and I feel a blessed soul, a blissful spirit, where there is no needing for anything but to be here, at this moment, in these words... and there is nothing else, nothing more to be wanted or needed, it's like Your Soul has float over eternity, and in each flight carried the same Love.

We might fall in love more than once in life, but my belief too, that when the realer truer deepest Love comes, when the "right one" comes, it's surely won't be like any other which came, or will even come, and You will be surprised, how it came, like it's the first... yet the last one, how there is always something new, something more to hold, to feel within it... there is no limits at all.

Splendid two pieces of arts.
Splendid Glory.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Well, Dear Littlesong,
I, for one, like your "me" and completely agree with your sentiments o.. read more
Before can even begin to review this poem, i need to address this picture! It is simply stunning! I love the calming color...its a oneness, representing the souls shared..along with the winding, spiraling forms..so beautiful and a lovely visual to this poem. Now, this poem...format aside ( which I am sure is written to perfection) is so truly,wonderfully, sooooo accurately, and soooo profoundly perfect in it's expression of love and what loving can bring out in a person.

"Tomes of gold inscribing new memoirs!" This line really got my attention (yes, I DO pay attention) I really like the correlation between tombs of gold and inscribing memoirs! These are words I dont think would ever come to my mind...yet, WOW how perfectly fitting !There is such a jubilation throughout this piece!! Ahhh that new love...is there anything more exciting?...idk...but those singing hearts!!...well now! can't ya just feel it..such deliciousness. Eyes open to the splendor of it all.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Susan,
Your shared inspiring sentiments of Andrew Gonzalez's painting, in the.. read more
Susan  Capozzi

4 Months Ago

:-) you're welcome.
how love lases all deep, jagged scars.
Splendored rays of passion’s heat … behold!

beautiful words as always coming from you richard..
it has a very soft and soothing feel to it...very alluring to the senses :)

enjoyed reading it.. the image also is quiet a match for the poem !

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Hi, Lovely Galadriel,
Your new pen-name and avatar are very fetching, indeed! : )
That.. read more

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