Love Gave Me Sight ... (soul breaths)

Love Gave Me Sight ... (soul breaths)

A Poem by Richard
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Sestets in 9-count lines of ababab, cdcdcd, etc; rhyme-scheme.

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Love Gave Me Sight 


Thinking I was such a special man …

ne’er I'd had a single clear insight;

’til, as ocean’s wide majestic span

her love ~ made me see one summer's night.

'Neath waxed moon, she formed a newborn plan …

my lonely soul, gifted wings for flight!


Memories poured from within my heart …

deepest, darkest cleansings taking place.

Her love made me ache for a fresh start;

all pain, swept aside through tender grace.

Olde love notions soon would fall apart

to vapors ~ vanished, with ne’er a trace.


New love made me gleam like spark'ling gold,

melting and re-forming then as stars,

from the heavens shining where they’ve told,

how love lasers all deep, jagged scars.

Splendored rays of passion’s heat … Behold!

Tomes of gold inscribing new memoirs!


Wrapped in aural flows, two now reborn,

as though fate, itself, embraced each soul …

every fibre of their beings torn,

rent from moorings, once again made whole.

She and me, love made ne’er more forlorn;

to each soul, renewed all life had stole.


Sunrise-glimmers dance off rippling rills,

across life’s pond's joyous revelry …

by each warbling mockingbird’s bright trills,

sung each hearts’ effulgent melody.

As sweep Nature’s verdant views, yon hills …

through new eyes ~ it’s Her, love's made me see.



Richard W. Jenkins

           ©2017


© 2018 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Painting: Amoré by Andrew Gonzalez, acrylics on clayboard.

Please, feel free to leave helpful critique,
or anything you believe will help better my craft! : )

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This is a lovely poem ... a gorgeous tribute to love. The second to last stanza is my favourite -- the passion and the rebirth of two as one.
Indulge me for a bit -- free from moorings as opposed to rent? just saying ...
Also, is there a reason for Nature and Her to be capitalised? Is it to emphasize the comparison between the force of Nature and the object of the speaker's affection?

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Month Ago

(the site ate my first response)

Thank you, Dear Lyn,
You gentle graciousness .. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Month Ago

I try to come across as I am. And yes, that makes sense. It just seems to me that having used torn i.. read more
Richard

1 Month Ago

They were torn beings, rent (ripped) from their moorings to finally be made whole.
To me, thi.. read more



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Beautiful words for a love that seems pure and crafted for kindred spirits.

Having gone through a painful breakup this year, I have been skeptical about love and romance for sometime, Richard. However, the bit about kindred spirits don't feel as jarring. Love can be a beautiful thing. Especially while the honeymoon period lasts.

May you live to be a hundred, as you continue to charm readers and writers alike.

Best,
M.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Wonderful use of words and thoughts my friend.
"As sweep Nature’s verdant views, yon hills …
through new eyes ~ it’s Her, love's made me see."
I did like the lines above. Thank you Richard for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Life in itself is like a carousel, where some would dare to ride or dwell. Cling fast to sweetest memories: enjoy the ride and in thine heart may LOVE abide!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Dear Kitty,
Your lovely words in review, a delightfully sweet poem in themselves.<.. read more
kitty

3 Weeks Ago

We live and learn and learn to live, dear Sir!
I loved every word you put into emotions upon paper,very classical of what a love poem pours out to the force of nature. Thank you so much for sharing you beautiful work to all of us on this page.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Weeks Ago

Such beautiful words and tender sentiments you've left for this romantic little piece, Lilly … you.. read more
You know me, I hate counting..anything..lol
But I must comment that this is BEAUTIFUL.. in every sense ..
'Beautiful' IS a common word.. I know, but it truly describes what
I see and feel here in your wonderful WORK !!

A delight.........♥


Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. J.  Nightingale

3 Weeks Ago

LOL... あなたは大歓迎です。
Richard

3 Weeks Ago

너 너무 달콤 해.
J. J.  Nightingale

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks.................... ♥
This is a lovely poem ... a gorgeous tribute to love. The second to last stanza is my favourite -- the passion and the rebirth of two as one.
Indulge me for a bit -- free from moorings as opposed to rent? just saying ...
Also, is there a reason for Nature and Her to be capitalised? Is it to emphasize the comparison between the force of Nature and the object of the speaker's affection?

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Month Ago

(the site ate my first response)

Thank you, Dear Lyn,
You gentle graciousness .. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Month Ago

I try to come across as I am. And yes, that makes sense. It just seems to me that having used torn i.. read more
Richard

1 Month Ago

They were torn beings, rent (ripped) from their moorings to finally be made whole.
To me, thi.. read more
nice poem. thanks for sharing your talent

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your lovely compliment, Roxane*
And, for selecting one of my humble pieces to read.. read more
All I can say at the moment is Oh. My. Gosh.

That was amazing.

Your 9-count was perfection until the last stanza:

"across life’s pond in joyous revelry …
each warbling mockingbird’s bright trills"

It still averages out to 9.

This is a beautiful poem, and a better wordsmith than me would be able to do it justice in this blue box.

You're a real poet.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

How wonderful, Karen,
You've selected a beautiful piece to begin a new relationship through o.. read more
"all pain swept aside through tender grace.
Olde love notions soon would fall apart,
to vapor vanished with ne’er a trace."

New, and real love has healing properties that can not be matched by any plant not extinct on our planet.

Artfully penned and the Olde English spelling with New English meaning gives it an "all eras" flavor.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

So beautifully expressed, Dear Carol,
Very wise and knowing, indeed, the soothing touches of .. read more
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your poem is already great. but this...is just, i mean c'mon : "anything you believe will help better my craft!" ...you have my full respect. i totally admire you. i meant your great talent! haha!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

After your review, LC,
I feel so very blessed, appreciated, and revered from such a lovely la.. read more
L.C. Jarrette

1 Year Ago

i don't know what to say...(still blushing) lol.
:D
Richard

1 Year Ago

I think you've said it very clearly, LC! ; )

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