Philly

Philly

A Poem by Rita L. Sev
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My poems tend to be more for fun rather than deep thought - this one is about my awesome city.

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Philly

The Liberty Bell
A hoagie or two
So much to see
So much to do
The Art Museum
Historic shows
Soft pretzels,
Cheesesteaks,
Boat House Row
Cobblestones beneath your feet,
William Penn above
Come to Philadelphia - 
City of Brotherly Love!

© 2013 Rita L. Sev


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Rita L. Sev,
At first I thought this was about Washington DC (shows how much I know!) You have brought me a desire to visit your fine city. It is portrayed in such a happy lighthearted way. Happy reading for sure! Blessings, Kathy

Posted 7 Years Ago


Hi, Rita! : )
Had to take a look-see at your first post; next, comparing what improvement and influence the site might have had on your latest … as a teacher of poetry, I enjoy taking this time and interest when reading a poet/poetess new to me.
Whenever one has enough pride in their city to pay homage to it in such a charming and enjoyable way, it is your readers and fans who reap the rewards … thank you for the everyday visuals of life there.
I very much enjoy your verses' jaunt and flow, skipping along in lively energy, rhyme, and beat … until L10, which is simply too long.
In an effort to help correct this, consider the following (or some-such):

Cobblestones 'neath feet,
William Penn above
Come to Philadelphia —
City of Brotherly Love!

Without proper punctuation, the lines tend to enjamb and rush. For presentation and eye/mind appeal, dividing the Quatrains into poetic verses will allow the reader to relax and breath, taking-in and appreciating the value each offers; also, I'm not a fan of unnecessarily capping every line.
Having said all that, I love this piece … you've made me want to visit "Philly" for all the sites and one of the famous "hoagies". : D

Thank you, Dear Poetess, for the pleasure and honor of allowing an honest review! ⁓ Richard

Posted 7 Years Ago


on my way ..who can resist the tasteful delights of the famous Philly Hoagie? :)

E.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

8 Years Ago

Wow - this is an old one! Glad you liked this taste of the city of brotherly love and sisterly affe.. read more
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

:) ...................
Fabulous, a dedication that merits applause, well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Thomas. This was one of my first posts here; I stil write a lot about Philly, co.. read more
Cities have the soul of the people within their bounds... you bring light and smiles.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Thank you, Chris! Philly has souls new and old roaming it's streets.
LOVE IT !!! This is so Philly.... very well done and great flow !! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Debbie! I had a feeling you might enjoy this simple piece. ;)
Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

:) I did I did ;)
Enjoyed the 'City of Brotherly Love!'
Very warm invitation.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Thanks. Yes, Philly is a great city!
zainul

10 Years Ago

:)
Philadelphia must be an awesome place. I am from the Philippines and I had to google every spot you've mentioned on your poem:D And they are all gorgeous! You have brought me to your beautiful place with such economy of words and that is an awesome skill:)


Posted 10 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Thank you, Maryanne - I truly appreciate this!
Androglossia

10 Years Ago

You're very welcome:)
Great piece. Simple phrases to describe a boatload of things and concepts. Nice write as usual :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Philly is the best, for sure. It's like New York but with style and personality.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

As a New Yorker, I felt morally obligated to respond. We have just as much style and personality as .. read more
Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Around here we say that Philly is "New York Lite". And I must apologize for the unfortunate ardor o.. read more
Will

10 Years Ago

Haha I understand, just reading that comment bubbled up the New York hustle in me I suppose. Still a.. read more

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