Deceptive Hologram

Physics has no business

in matters of heart space

void of formulas, logic or reason

 

Matriculated students of the subliminal

seeking hidden clues

of mutiny or treason

 

In the currency of compassion

fiscal apathy is on the books

Deceptive holograms are painted,

nothingness with reality’s looks

 

Unattractive nature,

a mask of charm juxtaposed

Like a brown and barren lawn

embellished with cheap flamingos  

Author's Note

For the "bad poetry" contest... :)

Reviews

[Angi]

Hey! This doesn't stink at all!! You are so not gonna win, missy. Hrmph. Angi~

[Rita L. Sev]

Lol! Thanks, Angi! This was a challenge!

[Brandon]

exquisite use of the english tongue.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Ghost Whisperer. This is not my usual style; it was written for a contest. Made me stretch a bit! I appreciate your read and review!

[redflutterby]

Not bad...not BAD at all!! And I loved it... ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! So glad you liked this, Red!

[Dye]

I wouldn't call this bad at all :)

You actually did justice to the words given for the contest.

It was fun to see how you used them, they were tricky for sure. It has been interesting to see what everyone is coming up with.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Dya! This was an interesting contest, so many different ways to use that list!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I don't consider this as a "bad poem", Rita. Sorry, you have no chance of winning if the "worst poem" gets to win. ;) This is a really good integration of the seemingly pointless words. Clever. Very clever :)

[Rita L. Sev]

The contest involves linking a random list of words; quite a challenge! Thanks, Blue!

[Lydia Shutter]

You really did a great job with the words provided....I nearly did not realize it was supposed to be a "bad" poem. Very creative, Rita. Lydi**

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Well, I thank you for that, Lydi!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is badly good..or goodly bad..
i haven't read one poem for this contest that has been bad...they have all been quite creative.

as is this one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jacob. This was a challenging contest - but fun. :)

[TL Boehm]

oh man! you rocked this. It is the opposite of bad - that last line especially - highly witty writing.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Tammy - this felt so out of my element. And, when my mother read it she said "What was that all about?" (she checks my page every day - probably making sure I don't post anything inappropriate...Moms...) ;) I'm glad someone got this piece!

[Tom]

When I was at school Maths/Physics were never my strong point, but I did get an O-level pass at English so I can emphasize completely with this delightful hypothesis!

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Thanks for the read of this confusing piece, Tom!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Another example of some very fine bad poetry, Rita. I'm certainly going to have a hard time figuring out which is the very best bad poem - wonder how the moderator will ever choose? lol Sounds like you had a lot of fun writing this, so all's well that end bad, I always say!

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Yes, these are fun to write - though it took a couple of days of pondering that list. I hope the moderator has as much fun reading them.

[Pollai]

Haha I am indeed, they have been brilliant :)