Shirley Charlene McDuff

Shirley Charlene McDuff

A Poem by Rita L. Sev
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Shirley Charlene McDuff

amassed mountainous piles of stuff:

knick-knacks, trinkets and small souvenirs,

calendar pages from the past dozen years,

books and plates and blankets and lamps,

collections of teacups and thimbles and stamps,

busted up drums and stringless guitars,

old Tupperware and cracked Mason jars,

dolls and toys and games from her youth,

her first lock of hair, her first-ever lost tooth

 

Shirley just could not part with it all

her stuff overflowed every shelf on the wall,

inside the cabinets and under the bed,

up in the attic and out in the shed…

 

Then Shirley went missing for one hundred days

her neighbor went in and confronted the maze

Shirley was located, surely enough

buried beneath her piles of stuff

 

(So, my dear friends, there’s a lesson to heed,

keep only the things you really do need

lest you suffer the fate of Shirley McDuff

and suffocate under your own useless stuff!)


© 2014 Rita L. Sev



Author's Note

Rita L. Sev
Brought to you by my own useless heaps that have been tossed over the past few weeks...

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Very well done Rita, clever and fun. Great mix of imagery and energy. Your poem had a nice soft flow that lets the reader enjoy the story. A good lesson to learn.
Richie

Posted 1 Year Ago


Rita L. Sev

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Richie! Glad you enjoyed!
Love your playful description of the hoarding tendencies most of us have, to some degree . . . it's always fun to poke fun at those who have it worse, cuz then we don't feel so bad about our own clutter, huh? You open with a delightful listing of many possessions, done with excellent rhyme & rhythm, reflecting the playful mocking tone of this piece. I also loved the next stanza describing all the ways junk can be stored & stacked up. The third stanza felt a bit of a letdown after this dramatic build-up . . . I was kinda expecting something with just a tad more drama, after your opening dramatic scene setup. For example, stacks tumbling like dominoes, or whatever, with just her slippers poking out in the place where an aisle used to be. Still, it's a fun & relatable read! Thanks for sharing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Rita L. Sev

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Barleygirl! It is hard to let go of some stuff, but so satisfying to bask in the space!
Damn, missed spring cleaning again. Gotta wait until next year. :)
Really loving your fun poems.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

Ha! I have to tell you, it was quite satisfying to get rid of a lot of junk! Thanks, Ance!
Matching Socks

3 Years Ago

I think I'd have an anxiety attack! :)
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DrD
This brings to mind the case of Langley Collyer. You'd probably enjoy reading about his death. Beyond that, this was a well metered work with excellent word selection. Fun to read and yet representing a true psychological problem for some. I enjoyed it very much.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

Thank you, DrD - I actually have read about the Collyer brothers; a fascinating case, at a time when.. read more
my mother was somewhat like this ... not so much to suffocate but enough to dazzle ... she always would say to those who had the temerity to ask .. "When you need something .. won't you be glad that i have it"
She always did .. and knew just where it was ;)
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

If your mother knew where it was, and she got use out of her stuff, then she had it together! Over .. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

yes she certainly did have it together .. we miss her dearly ..
E.
I think there is a secret hoarder in all of us. One thing I do know for sure, is that the very moment I finally throw something away, I find I need it the very next day.

Much enjoyed this. :)

Beccy

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

:) It can be hard to let go, that's so true. You have a point, too - but anything we really need, w.. read more
OMG, Rita, this is so appropos for me right now. Cleaning out my mother in law's condominium and wondering why she kept some of the stuff she kept. It has prompted my hubby and me to clean out the "stuff" we are buried under in our home. A delightfully humorous look at the hoarder. The rhyming is perfect! Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

Thanks, Lydi! It's so easy to see it in other people's homes, but it's so hard to part with our own.. read more
HA! I am saying nothing about my piles, LOL -- if you saw them, you'd die of a coronary. Nah, only kidding, I am quite the neat little person... I like everything look tidy and all. If I went to her house and saw that, I'd walk right back out, LMAO! You made me laugh.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

:) Thanks, Noodle - you know I love to give a laugh! My own piles are finally gone, and believe me.. read more
cute I always say if you havent touched it in a year let it go

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

You should have seen all that we threw out last week during some renovations... let's just say there.. read more
Were it not for the multitude of moves I've made over the years, I might have found myself in the same predicament...I always hated parting with the most minor possessions...your dry humour is definitely in full force here, and the rhymes are spot-on...great work my friend.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

3 Years Ago

Thanks, Steve. It is getting easier to toss things than when I was younger, but I know I have still.. read more

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