Together Forever!!

Story of two green leaves.....

Always together, It was always forever...

The evergreen leaves thought, it would change never.

Whether the summer, or the rain.

whether the winter, or the hail.

They faced all the phases together.

And the evergreen leaves thought, it would change never.

One day a storm hit the forest...

hitting the biome without a warrant.

not caring for anything and whoever...

The evergreen leaves still thought, they would be together forever..

Not knowing the intention of the storm...

They sang together, the love form..

When the Tree was hit hard, the leaves flew without endeavour.

And the evergreen leaves thought, it would change Sooner.

The storm took the leaves in different directions.

Looking for each other, they could not find their destinations.

After the storm, they landed with a terror,

And the evergreen leaves believed, they would definitely get-together.

Reviews

[mou]

An unknown storm will stoop its head in front of a strong believe ..
And it is the main content that clear every exam without any struggle.
I can understand the feelings of the words used here and completely agree with it.
Thanks for sharing the beautiful one

[Riti Rajput]

Thanks Mou for understanding the motive behind incomplete ending of the poem.... :) :) :)

[Ria Carol]

Its amazing how you have taken a simple idea if two leaves and created something magical with it...for not being a writer you are pretty good :)

[Riti Rajput]

thanks you so much for stopping and and reading my poem... :)

[barleygirl]

Your poem is one of the best allegories I've read in awhile. You've done a brilliant job describing something in nature, sticking to your analogy thru-out, & without any other explanation, it's very clear what the underlying message is all about. Your storytelling is superb here, but your poetry form is a little weak. The rhymes work sometimes, other times, not so much. The rhythm is a bit bumpy. The poetry police wouldn't be so complimentary, but for me, the intent is what's important here. You've conveyed a story that resonates with most people, the way we go into a relationship thinking "forever" but life has different ideas. The ending is a bit surprising & haunting, as I didn't expect it to end on a stubbornly hopeful note, rather than accepting how life can be. Your ending leaves the reader with a question mark -- not a bad thing, just a little bit of tension as we wonder about it.

[Riti Rajput]

Thanks a lot for your review barleygirl...
I am trying to improve my poetry, as I feel the same about it as you do... And I am sure one day you will be able to give me a positive response...
Thanks for liking and understanding the idea of the poem.. and I know the end may not be proper for you... But for some stories, end remains incomplete..
Thanks again for your review... :)

[iamshadowine]

a very beautiful poem! keep writing

[Riti Rajput]

Thanks for your review dear...

[Shabeeh Haider]

This is a beautiful write. Summer or winter, rain or hail, they were always together until the cruel hand of fate sent a storm that separated them.
Would they ever meet again? Would the be together? Your last line is all about their faith.
"And the evergreen leaves believed, they would definitely get-together."

[Riti Rajput]

Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem...
They will definitely meet if their belief of meeting is actually strong... So it depends on the two of them.. :)