Unbinded Freedom

You said you loved me

I turned my head

Impossible to believe

All that you said

 

I searched my heart

Dug really deep

But all I found
Not mine to keep

 

So I walked away

Though stumbled twice

I stood again

Without a price

The cuts you made

They bled a bit

But now they're scars
The pain will quit

 

I told myself

So many times

No love like this

Would steal my rhymes

I broke away

To where I'm free

For love that waits

Is near I see

 

So I'll try again
With shield as friend

I'll guard it all

It's mine to lend

 

For as I age

I come to learn

That true love itself

Is mine to earn

Reviews

[Bear]

Thank YOU for bringing this to my attention!! ;~) I enjoy each verse for different reasons; they each remind me of times in my past life experiences and you're correct the cuts made in the past do heal leaving scars of course but, I'm glad to say that sometimes when past loves cross my mind I smile at the memories once shared; and once in a blue moon when "our paths cross" in the present I'm actually glad to see him looking as well and happy as he does. Thanks again for sharing this with me.
Sallie Bear

[Crazy Cat Man]

an important lesson to us all. Disappointments and rejects......do teach us something about patience.....thats how i look at it. Great piece :D

[Michael Kerr]

what made you write this?

-mike kerr-

[LlamaLord]

Very wonderfully written. Great read! Thanks :D

[The Grammar Nazi]

Good write, though the one I read previous shows a bit more emotion. Well written.

[Catastrophe]

Whilst reading this i could feel some sadness, but as i moved on across each line
it felt like the words themselves were beginning to "age" and that just gave it
a much more stronger feel to the whole piece. I dont know if that was ever an idea in your mind
but i'd love to know; each stanza is evenly worked on. And the rhyming pattern stays intact through it all.
Great write, a broken heart does make us stronger sometimes.

[Susan]

so very true. I can identify with it.

[Fran Marie]

For as I age

I come to learn

That true love itself

Is mine to earn

A great flowing piece expressed and penned quite nicely~

True love is worth earing indeed!~

THanks for sharing~Fran Marie

[AK]

Very, very nice. I really like the brief verses and the rhythm. Great work on the rhyming scheme too!.

[lauren emily]

Very good poem. Descriptive, calming, and beautiful.