Concrete

The coldness of stone...

Those cracks?
I filled them with concrete
That cold? 
Quieted the heartbeat

It once,  it was once in pieces
Feels nothing now
No warmth, no breath
No pain to allow

Can't be broken
Never to feel
For this hurt is sealed
No emotion to conceal

Author's Note

It's a short, let me know your thoughts. Comments appreciated!

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Rosalee,
I wonder how many will relate to the essence of your emotional imagery and vivid, metaphorical heart-touches pouring forth from the poignancy of your tender words(?) … I know I certainly do.
Whether autobiographical or shared from keenly experienced observation, I virtually feel the angst painfully oozing from the hard, cold concrete cracks in your stilled heartbeats.
Nice, simple rhymes, in a smoothly rendered flow, enchant and hold the mind's-eye.

How remarkable it is the heart never forgets how warmly enchanting its beats once felt, and most will feel again, once all the lonely concrete has chipped and fallen away … smiles 'n hugs of tender thanks, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )

(how wonderfully perfect the picture is … I'll send you the instructions for posting it big, atop your poem)

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the heart felt and detailed reviews so much, especially coming from such a skilled poet! I'm honored!

Love this comment about not forgetting how the heart once felt to beat. I think it's so true. No matter the darkness one can feel our souls remember the light of day. Thanks Richard!

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Rosalee …
Despite whatever we may put them through, hearts remain pure and willing under all our bruises, cracks, and defenses.
Such a warm and appreciative response you've left (a poem in itself) graces a smile to this rugged bard's mug … you make me blush* : )

Rosalee,
You are ever-so welcome. 🍃

[mum]

I think this poem being short is perfect. It is sweet and to the point. I love the visual of our past hurts being filled with something as strong as concrete. beautiful.

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Thank you so much for your review!

[Misterr Remeat]

Concrete breaks down over time.
Maybe that's for the best.
Thought provoking work!

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Thank you! I love hearing that!

[wordman]

but one day someone will come along and crack that stone

[EcstaticEuphoria]

That'd be wonderful 😉 haha thanks for your review

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Paul Bell]

I like this. But I would swap the last two lines around.
Can't be broken
Never to feel
No emotion to conceal
For this hurt is sealed

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Thank you so much for the feedback Paul! I'll review, thanks for stopping in

[Suhd]

Filled with deep emotion. I like this a lot ! Great job!

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Thank you so much for stopping in, honored