Control Of Fire

The bright flames circle me,

Telling me of the passion it holds.

The flames call to me,

Through the darkness,

With the wave of that calling finger,

Pulling me towards it's heat,

To it's heart.

Pulling me closer,

Nearer 

Covering me in love,

Smothering me in the fiery passion.

Welcoming me into it's open embrace,

Ready to protect yet hurt me in one.

The flames are in my head,

Chanting promising words,

Telling me they protect,

Telling me I'm safe,

But the fire can't hold me,

I'm free of it's heat of its hate and love.

Never again will I let the fire hold me so close,

Never again will I let it control me.

Author's Note

This is my first time trying poetry when I'm not deeply hurt or upset by something so it feels a bit weird and hard for me to get it to work.If you think it needs changed completely or in a certain place please let me know.And if there are any spelling errors again please tell me :)

Reviews

[李[A]]

Hi again! I'm going to give you a few pointers in terms of grammar. "it's heat to it's heart" -- this is saying "it is heat to it is heart". Possessive "it" is "its". I like the general thematic scheme of this poem. At points, it's very clandestine, but others very aboveboard. Nice job!

[blueseeker]

I really like how you wrote this in the state you were in. Knowing this, let me read it in a different perspective. Excellent work, please keep writing.

[Jupiter Jazz]

Like this. Being consumed by passion and then realizing its getting in the way of reality. Lot of people know that story. Tres bien!

[deeps]

Like the emotions in this write.
Very nicely written.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

For this being a write for you when your not hurt or upset, it's really good sis; i love how you made the picture and wrote it around the fire and flames; that's something different. I wouldn't change it at all, didn't see spelling errors though wasn't lookin' for them caught up in the poem, if there's any they prolly went past my eyes. lolz. This is great tho, really enjoyed it, i can't choose just a couple lines i like, i like 'em all.