Scars

Scars

A Poem by Rose Diamond
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I just want to put a trigger warning on this for anyone who has ever self-harmed

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Criss Cross
Criss Cross
Up and down her arms
Criss Cross
Criss Cross
Eight fading scars
Criss Cross
 Criss Cross
She hid them all in shame
Criss Cross
Criss Cross
Each one has a name

The first one's name is 'ugly'
The second's name is 'baby'
Both of which are small and crude
Shallow, red, and shaky

The third one goes by 'w***e'
Quite a cleaner cut
We call the fourth one 'emo kid'
The fifth one's name is 's**t'

The sixth one is christened 'Gothic b***h'
The seventh 'f*g' and 'gay'
She's sewn her mouth
stitch by stitch
But theirs' went on all day

The eighth one hurt her the most
That I guarantee
They told her to go kill herself
And she almost did proceed

But she took a moment for herself
Put away the knife
And in that second she could see 
The beauty in her life

The bluebirds humming their heavenly hymn
The flowers in full bloom
The twinkling stars when the sky is dim
The romance of the moon

  Criss Cross
Criss Cross
Each is a battle she had won
Criss Cross
Criss Cross
Her story's just begun  

© 2013 Rose Diamond


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Very good poem. It flowed nicely and you didn't overdo the repetition. It does a good job at painting a picture on just what bullying can do to people. I do believe the emotion switch at the end happened just a little to suddenly. It took me out of the zone for just a moment, it just needs a smoother transition. Beyond that, the poem and message were both wonderful.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I love this poem so much

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very sad, but the message ended up being lovely. Fantastic message accompanied by an easy to read fluent rhyming. I really liked this, I'm glad her story's just begun. It's important to remember that there's always beauty in even the darkest moments. Keep writing your poetry.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very wonderful piece of writing.Great job:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Holy wow. This is wow. A must share to all my friends that are struggling. Thank you for the hope and inspiration.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the way you tell the story of one's suffering and end it beautifully :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an impressive piece! You've combined emotion and rhythm in a masterful way, this is tragically beautiful. My pen hand bows to you here.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yo I love this one it works so good because You can see it as you read it this is amazing and this comment is a understatement because my vocabulary is not where I wish it was to be able to accurately express how great this piece is. Beautiful to say the least thank you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! this is stunning. I love the rhythm and rhyming scheme of this poem. The emotional scars that manifest into physical scars. Great write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Rose Diamond

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much! :)
this was deep and pretty disturbing, usually when i see these types of rhyme schemes they're ALMOST always a light and airy and fun poems. but this right here, wow. that's pretty much all i can say, good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Rose Diamond

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much! :D

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Rose Diamond
Rose Diamond

Canada



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(Formerly Rosie-Chan) Hi there! My name is Rose, I'm 17, I love theatre, music, and literature, and I am a poet! I am literally the most inconsistent poet ever, but I'm ok I guess. more..

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