Soap

Soap

A Poem by Bad Poetry

Pain. 
tears from the eyes.
broken ties.
running out of that place.
an empty space.
hopes so high.
nothing hurts more than soap in the eyes.

© 2013 Bad Poetry



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Well, it cracked me up! Thanks for the laugh. Perhaps "tears" would be better than "crying".

It's quite ambiguous actually, I'm really starting to think there's depth here, "broken ties" hmmmm. Yep, the more I think about it the more I fall in love with it, I'm trying to bridge the gap between the last line and the rest of it...I'm thinking hard. As a result of that, you've done your job as a poet. Wonderful.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bad Poetry

4 Years Ago

thanks for the great advice i'll change it right now.



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amazingly written keep it up !!


Posted 2 Years Ago


Agreed! And also: nothing tastes worse than soap (so far) :D Very cool! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


I though this piece was going to be sad but it turned to be really funny so thank you haha!! its a really good piece!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


That will do it love the way you projected your poem fine works

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is true...cute one...SyberRose

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The symbolism in this poem is stounding. Nicely done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

like the way it reads thank you

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well, it cracked me up! Thanks for the laugh. Perhaps "tears" would be better than "crying".

It's quite ambiguous actually, I'm really starting to think there's depth here, "broken ties" hmmmm. Yep, the more I think about it the more I fall in love with it, I'm trying to bridge the gap between the last line and the rest of it...I'm thinking hard. As a result of that, you've done your job as a poet. Wonderful.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bad Poetry

4 Years Ago

thanks for the great advice i'll change it right now.
This is a good piece. I can't work out whether the final line is a deliberate anti-climax for comedic effect or something kind of profound. Nicely structured rhyme.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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