The Demise

The Demise

A Poem by RyanXIII
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A haiku i wrote.

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Lights of Glory Shine

Descent to Infernal Pits

Great Demise Begins

© 2013 RyanXIII



Author's Note

RyanXIII
I was in a funny mood this morning...

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short but i like it! you should post this kind of stuff more often

Posted 4 Years Ago


Reminds of dante's inferno
gets me a great picture of release

Posted 4 Years Ago


This offers a visually strong contrast between light and darkness, good and evil, etc. Perfect writing, but may I suggest a stronger, bolder font that drives home the words. The font feels weak next to these words.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RyanXIII

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your comments
A short poem with such strong words

Lights Glory Shine Descent Internal Great Demise Begins - and among them some are beautiful sound ones - descend, great, demise, glory

A good mood and a good poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RyanXIII

4 Years Ago

thank you for your comments im glad it struck a chord
I like this piece. Very hard to write haikus (for me at least) but you wrote an exellent one. Nice job, i enjoyed reading

Posted 4 Years Ago


RyanXIII

4 Years Ago

thank you very much i hope you enjoyed my contest entry also
Personally, I've never attempted Haiku but I do like this.

It's deep and makes the reader think. That's important, I think.

Altogether, keep it up. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Nice

Posted 4 Years Ago


Hey! So I admire your stab at a haiku poem, because it's (obviously) hard to pack much into such a short statement. This was pretty good, as it is, and better than most haikus I've seen.

Anyway, keep writing, and best wishes.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Nice job. Even though I'm not the best person to review poetry, I really like this. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Pretty good really, maybe don't use so many caps. Haiku is an informal form of poetry. But still a good job.

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Added on May 6, 2013
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Tags: haiku, death, hell, heaven

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RyanXIII
RyanXIII

Northumberland, United Kingdom



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