Life.

 He sat alone

Cold snow falling

Mind wandering.

 

Unhappy torrmented

Cold and wet 

Obsessing yet regreting

Barely living.

Reviews

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

It's not unusual to barely live.. actually .. most people barely live..most feel alone .. ask anyone..funny.. that when you really look at it.. it is the rare breed who breaks the wall between themselves and the world.. I liked that the poem was brief and expressed so much ..and it did it well.. by the way it is just my opinion.. that people barely live..

[Lost?]

I love your writing and I loved this piece.
It's short and a little sad.
Those are my favorite stories,
the ones that show people as they really are, broken and defeated.
It makes the world a little more comforting in a weird sort of way.
Wonderful really :)

- Lost?

[C.L. Wilson]

very dark writing and yes it's powerfully short. i like it. there's always a certain charm with short poetry that i never tire of.

[Piikapoka]

its amazing how such a small piece can be so moving.

[..R.I.P..]

Short and powerful. Very good and full of emotion. I can relate, and so will others. Great write.
~PJ

[Jasmin]

Short and powerful, those are my favorite kind of poems. Ones that you can relate to in a stronger way are some of my favorite kinds of poems to. I liked this poem, good job :)

[Last Lying Look]

*sigh* I can relate.
I really like how this is so short & yet it's still very interesting.
It's descriptive.
You used very few words & made them count.
Great work!
-Elissa

[Emily B]

I've seen writers who could pen whole volumes and not say as much. This is an accomplished work. Skillful use of words.

[Hedra Helix]

geezus, I remember that. Its like we each take turns livin in that body/mind/place.

wake up the world is wide and you are fine inside. trust me.

intensely pointed write. brave.

[Encore]

Vague... Yet descriptive. Nice.