Deconstruction and Sea Sickness

One for when you've broken something

I know not of love

Love knows not of me

Sick builds its way up

Brick by brick

Swirling through my stomach

Crashing against my heart

Waves against the shore

Tearing me apart

Crimson blood

Alabaster bone

Strip me down to raw materials

Break me down to mere minerals

Calcium, Iron and Magnesium

Heart, Mind and Soul

Lay me down cold-- in pieces

Simple deconstruction

For I know not of love

Reviews

[Krystyna Herst]

Very deep and emotional. I like it :)

[Kandy Kitt]

Well this was touching. Since I feel the exact way of your first two lines. Stop being such a good writer kay? You're making me look bad.

[recantichize]

wonderfully emotive. well done.

[eatmills]

Really good. I really liked the imagery.

[Rylan Leif]

@Aella.lives haha thanks for noticing! I have ridiculous tags on all of my writing :P

[Aella.lives]

I'll say you have me floored. I love this, "I know not of love/ Love knows not of me"... I feel like I can much relate.

p.s. your tags are a riot, "men do not require shirts at all" lol.

[Raitiz]

Deep, love it

[Frances Erie]

I really love this. Especially the first two lines.