Halcyon

One for birds

Into the woods to lose myself

Reinvent the pieces that I wish to change.

Shave off the edges in my jigsaw-- make it all fit.

Escape with the kingfishers who sing inside the canopy

Completely immune to the troubles hiding below.

Safe from the big bad wolf of conformity.

Into the woods to find someone to love

I'll walk along a path until the time is right.

Our paths will merge and the pieces will click.

The birds will sing of love, love, love.

Safe from the big bad wolf of loneliness.

We ran to the woods to escape the world.

Escape the evil queens who'd have our hearts cut out

Escape the step mothers who'd have us slave our lives away

Escape the wolves who'd trick us to our deaths.

We ran to the woods to escape all the evil

Made it to the edge with the help of the birds.

Climb the trees and leap from the highest branch

Hand in hand we'll make our getaway into the clouds.

Reviews

[Tabitha t]

i LOVE THIS. iT REMINDS ME OF THE FACT THAT AS A CHILD i WANTED NOTHING MORE THEN TO LEAVE AND LIVE IN THE WOODS HAPPY AND CONTENT WITHOUT SOCIETY

[eatmills]

I rip out my tongue so I can tell no lies.

Dude, there is nothing happy about this poem at all unless your a happy crazed stalker. *Evil Laughter Here* I however LOVE IT!

[Aella.lives]

Snickers *Happy because you touch yourself at night* That was awesome... annnnways.. I always love your writing, and I have to agree that it feels like a "happy-ish" poem... but it still sticks to your type of writing. It still has dark elements, like the woods, the "big bad wolf"... "conformity"... and that's what I like. :)

[koty bell]

hey man no complaints here great piece

[Geraldine]

Ayayay! haha I think you should write more happy-ish poems. ^^ I so love this. I agree with Gabriel, that if you simplified some parts it could be better. It's a happy-ish poem, so I think it doesn't have to be that deep, but it is just in my opinion. :) But overall, I like it and it's good. And I so love how you always come up with intriguing and interesting titles. ^^

[Gabriel Miller]

Ooh I like this poem. All the fairytale reverences are extremely well placed. I think if you were to cut out some of the more wordier parts and simplify them without losing meaning it might flow better of course but an great piece none-the-less with lots of fun imagery

[JustLorry]

well I think you should definitely keep up the happy-ish :-)
Great write. Filled with vivid imagery and heartfelt longing.