Can't Talk Sober

Talking out loud is easier than it sounds

Different words swirl around in my head

And then I think of how you might respond

While my feelings go up and down

 

I don’t want to turn to alcohol

I don’t want to be under that influence

Talking things out is no easy feat

But alcohol isn’t my mediator

 

I get so lost in my emotions

I speak faster than I can think

Then stumble on everything I’m trying to say

And when I do find the courage to try and speak

It comes out the wrong way in the wrong sound

 

Wrong time, wrong place

Wrong words, wrong phrase

My nerves get the best of me

When I can’t talk sober

 

And so, we do sit down, to try and talk

I’m at a loss for words, unsure if

You want to hear what I have to say

But here we sit, together or not

 

We need to say our differences

Hearing how each other feels

Understanding each other’s view

Agreeing to disagree or finding our own way

 

I get so lost in my emotions

I speak faster than I can think

Then stumble on everything I’m trying to say

And when I do find the courage to try and speak

It comes out the wrong way in the wrong sound

 

Wrong time, wrong place

Wrong words, wrong phrase

My nerves get the best of me

When I can’t talk sober

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

To become a good speaker. Take practice.
"Wrong time, wrong place
Wrong words, wrong phrase
My nerves get the best of me
When I can’t talk sober"
But, old wisdom. Real voice and real person is present when the drink is in charge. Thank you Sarah for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris]

All the more reasoning used in the "He said, she said, he said ...and they did - something that didn't always mean the end-of-the-world ...together." Daydreams and nightdreams to wander within and dream through.

I understood your verses and saw the person within them.

[emmajoy]

As a quite long poem, this strikes so many chords.. poor pun.. but is true. There's a sadness needing to birth, words that need to sing slow, flowing up down a good key, But i wonder at the sentences' length.. whether or not you could edit the length of each line, find a specific meter. That said, the words do touch the mind.. the heart. 'Wrong time, wrong place ~ Wrong words, wrong phrase ~ My nerves get the best of me~ When I can’t talk sober.. '

[Davidgeo]

It's good writing. But you use too many words to have a smooth flow.

Word economy... always be as economical as you can when you're writing most poetry or lyrics.

[Sarah]

Where do you recommend changes, if you don't mind me asking?

[Davidgeo]

I'd have to rewrite the entire poem to make any recommendations meaningful. Being spare while being meaningful is a stylistic approach... you have to have it in mind before you even start putting your ideas into form.

[Sarah]

Thank you for the tip.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Love to know the 'tabs' and manuscript composition that holds up your lyrics - looks the making of a good song! Bless … :-)

[emipoemi]

When's the record coming out!? I could feel the melody of this and the lines are juicy (particularly those in the chorus). Marvellous! Well done!

[Sarah]

Thank you! I am about halfway through writing the album. Getting ready to record it.