Muses Musing

Muses Musing

A Poem by Shannon
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Some thoughts

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Muses Musing

On the nature of inspiration
And connection and sharing.

Of lives far apart in miles,
Experience and creed.

Grieving connections lost to the ether,
Stories untouched upon, words unused.

Muses musing

On the power and fragility
of humanity and of friendship.

© 2017 Shannon



Author's Note

Shannon
Sometimes we miss old friends.

I suspect this needs a bunch of work. It's pretty unpolished yet, so if you have constructive ideas, I'd love to hear them.

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Your thoughts are very true and expressive. Relationships are an investment of time, effort and emotions. They involve risk and sacrifice. This was a good poem with an important subject.

Posted 1 Month Ago


missing old friends,a touching write

Posted 1 Month Ago


Hello Shannon, thanks for sharing this emotionally connective work of poetry. My first reading of this piece brought an image of brokenness, something that was built on a solid foundation but somehow broke down internally. Online friendships are may be distant and unpredictable ones in modern day life but for some of us they do matter deeply even though sometimes the other person do not recognize that at all or may be they do recognize that but they are dealing with their own chaotic world that they do not want put this frndship or us under trouble.

But I really like the emotional vibes that you have portrayed here through your words and they represent what truly inner bondings of frndships are. I can feel the sense of loss in your words.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Hi, Shannon,
It's just Richard, come to see you for awhile, being sent by a mutual friend, so kind and true.
Cyber friendships and relationships create many muses and some of the most amazingly emotional, beautiful, and sad poems one ever could hope to enjoy and be deeply affected by, and when it is over, they leave without notice, or from unkind words, it can leave the muse adrift and lonely, saddened, and blue … yes, Shannon, sooo fragile we find we truly are.
There is a certain amount I could offer in critique, but from the nuance, relatable emotion, and moment of your words, I'd say it's about perfect.

Thank you, Shannon … it is a pleasure to enjoy you! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 1 Month Ago


Shannon

1 Month Ago

Hello Richard. Thank you do much for stopping by;its a pleasure to make you acquaintance. I am curio.. read more
Richard

1 Month Ago

Shannon,
I, too, am pleased! : )
it feels unpolished-
but it's brokenness connects
the lives far apart in miles...
i really get this one.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Shannon

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much Bacchus, who was convinced from the beginning that I did indeed have the capacity .. read more
I definitely felt this piece and know the feeling well. I've lost more friends than I care to remember. It's probably what I do best, grin. I did definitely get every idea you laid out here, but I didn't feel the pain fully before it ended, it would be lovely if you could add some more to this piece, if there is anything still unsaid? If not, it stands well on it's own! Thank you

Posted 2 Months Ago


Shannon

1 Month Ago

Thank you William. I appreciate the feedback.
For me the piece does represent this particula.. read more
Hi Shannon,
It was the title that got my attention, and i'm glad it did. What a wonderful piece. I think pretty much everyone on here felt every word, and probably didn't even realise they were holding their breath and nodding in knowing agreement, as they read each line.
If writerscafe had a graveyard, for all of yesterdays ghosts, these would be on a plaque, front and centre, under the words "to the fallen."
I think this might be my new favouritest :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


Shannon

2 Months Ago

Hi Lorry,

Thank you do much for sharing the beautiful connection you made with the p.. read more
Lorry.

2 Months Ago

Glad to hear it :)
Reading this, I couldn't help but think of Dhiman. I hope he is well.

I think the poem is good, you've expressed your feelings quite well, the only thing I would change is, I wouldn't use the word connection twice. Maybe you can replace the second one with bonds.

Many of us understand all too well what you mean by the power and fragility of friendships, especially online when it is so easy to just disappear.


Posted 2 Months Ago


Shannon

2 Months Ago

The nature of the relationships developed has consistently surprises me.

I appreciate.. read more
It's that everlasting friendship that dies an untimely inexplicable death, that hurts the deepest...
We humans are fragile, I think even more than we admit ... I am still mourning a few online Poet friendships ... sigh.. but my Good Memories are forever ..... ♥...

A Good-Heart-full Write...

Jazzy

Posted 3 Months Ago


i really enjoyed this piece., this really touched me as I know the feeling only too well. Sometimes I miss people even when they dont go away, but change. Maybe I'm clingy. :) Connections are amazing to me, especially when they're not obvious. Who knew lives far apart in miles could connect and share? Amazing :) Very heartfelt words. Thanks for sharing this with us.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Shannon

3 Months Ago

I think it's important to let ourselves acknowledge that we miss people. Makes it easier to be okay .. read more

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