HELP ME JESUS!

BATTELiiNG WiiTH THE iiNNER ME!

WHEN WiiLL THESE DAYz END, WHEN WiiLL THE BATTLEz iiN MY HEAD, DiiSAPPEAR! iiM TiiRED OF TEARz, ii FEAR, THAT ii'M NOT GOOD ENOUGH, FOR THAT ONE, GOD THAT iiS! ii KNOW WE ARE ALL HiiS KiiDz, BUT WHEN WiiLL MY, PEiiCE OF MiiND, ARRiiVE, AND DO TiiME? CAN ii CLOSE MY EYEz, AND NOT HAVE TO WONDER WHY? ii'M ONLY GETTiiNG OLDER, NOT YOUNGER. ii WANT TO FEEL LOVED THE RiiGHT WAY, NOT LiiKE ii FELT WHEN HE RAPED ME! iiT WAS A MENTAL BLOCK, A STUMBLiiNG ROCK, BUT ii WAS OVER THAT HiiLL, LiiKE JACK AND JiiLL, ii FELL DOWN! JUDGED BY CROWDz, AND ALWAYz WORE A FROWN! THESE ARE MY EMOTiiONz WRiiTTEN DOWN, BUT iiT SEEMz ii DROWNED iiN MY OWN FEELiiNGz! ii'M TRYiiNG TO LET GO, HELP ME JESUS!

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Jason]

I liked this piece for tow reasons. 1. I can feel the pain in you writting, somethings i can relate too and others I can't but i can still feel your pain none the less. 2. Is that in like two or three years you are going to look back on this piece and say "Thank you Jesus", instead of "help me". Im only speaking like this cause i know. Great write and keep writing.




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[Drew Wade]

wow.. to be truthful, I kind of expected the worst when I saw this.. but I have to be honest, this thing flowed. you have a nice, rhythmic style. I think some parts could be improved (maybe structurally, and sometimes the z's and double i's can be a bit much) but I'm impressed. thanks for sharing this.