THE GIRL

MANY WINDS WASH YOUR APPEARANCE, 

LIKE MASKING GLITTER, TO BE SHOWN 

AGAIN & AGAIN FOR SHARED CELEBRATIONS, 

ALL THE PAST, DEFINES THE SOIL, 

UNDERGROUND AND HIGHER, 

NO DESTRUCTION OR SCREAM OF THE WILD 

IT TOILS WITH AGE, 

ENABLE ME TO SQUEEZE OUT YOUR LIFE, 

SO BLEED

HAND IT OVER

THEN YOUR BODY WILL BE MINE, 

YOUR BLOOD IN MINE, 'WHY WONT YOU DIE?' 

YOU STRAYED SO FAR AWAY, 

YOU KEPT YOUR PUZZLEMENT SHUT OUT WHILE THEY KEPT BARKING, 

ONCE THERE WASN'T ANY WAY TO LET IT GO, 

ANY WAY TO LET IT OUT

THERE BESTOWED ON YOU, NOT ONE WAY TO REPLACE IT

ALL THE WORDS YOU KNOW, 

IN YOUR HANDS, YOU OWN, AND, YET, 

NONE OF THEM HAS EVER DESCRIBED:

THE CITY AFAR, IN RUINS, 

ITS OWN MONA LISA, 

A CASTLE STILL STANDING FROM PERMANENT DEFEAT, 

A WAY OF LIVING STRUCK 

DOWN FOR LIVING, TOO QUICK IS THEM, 

THEM THAT SHATTER FROM INTERNAL PRESSURE, 

SHOWING 

JUST AS QUICK

Reviews

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

This is really good its entertaining to read. I will tell you it could be great.
Some of your lines are relate-able some leave me blank.
ALL THE PAST, DEFINES THE SOIL,
UNDERGROUND AND HIGHER,
NO DESTRUCTION OR SCREAM OF THE WILD
These are good because they are dramatic and artistically done but they are also relate-able.
When I read the first line I imagine who planted the garden before mine and blood on the soil.
Which is probably not all normal however poetry is
subjective when lines made relate-able everyone may interpret differently.
The first three lines of the Poem are entertaining
I love to read but they do not get my imagery
going but when I read the the next three that I
gave example of they hit me with pleasant and harsh images at the same time and I Iike that soft and harsh reality thing that is how I attempt Poetry.
Good Job ROCK ON !!!!

Sheer Terror

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Every touch of the beautiful make-up girl by the flow of the wind.. look and feel... like a washing

[DANGER]

I'm not done. I just need to think .. with new comment box.
Dammmit! I know I was trying to say something that didn't fit!!! and now I wish I'd written IT ALL!!! BUT THANK YOU SO MUCH.. I WAS ANGRY.. THE MIDDLE IS SUPPOSED TO BE ACCUSING? YEA, I'M SO PERPLEXED.

[DANGER]

HER APPEARANCE WAS LIKE THE GLITTER... THE MASK... FOREVER WORN...
AND THE LIFE OF THE PAST SHOULD BE GIVING BECAUSE OF IT'S OLD STATUS.. GRRR AND EW.. ARRR!!

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Oh, I am not a make up girl but I get it now the glitter thing makes sense. I really like the poem so take the make up lines to an artistic harsh level or you know what you want with this. I dont want to over step I just wanted you to know some really great lines with a few changes. I hope I wasnt over the top. You should read "hammer on metal"
I enjoyed writing it.

Sheer Terror

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THE ONES FROM THE PAST (USU. RELIGION GONE BAD OR HOW THY TREAT PPL) THEY REALLY REALLY STRAYED... THAT IS THE EMPHASIS.
PPL OF OLD (I GUESS) DIDN'T PAY ENOUGH ATTENTION TO OTHER WILD THINGS EVEN THO' THEIR NATURE WAS TO BE PUZZLED.

[DANGER]

SO PUZZLEMENT KEPT TO THEM .. STUCK TO THEM.

OKAY OKAY! JUST ONE MORE!!

ALL THEIR FANCY, BETTER THAN THOU WORDS, "NEVER DESCRIBED" THIS : ... *(FEELING) LIKE RUINS IN OUR BACKYARD, WE FEEL IT

[DANGER]

THIS IS THE LAST! I PROMISE

THIS HOME OF A REAL KIND OF ECONOMY/GOV'T... THEY WOULD BE STRUCK DOWN FOR LIVING, BECAUSE MAYBE THEIR OWN SYSTEM OR MAYBE THE OUTSIDERS. THIS IMAGE IS DESCRIBING LIFE SO QUICKLY AND I THINK THAT IT IS JUST AS QUICK AS THE SECRET *THEIR LIVES* HAD LIVED. OR! I DON'T KNOW WHAT I MEAN!!! THANKSSS=REEEALY

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Is this about judgement and religion
YOU KEPT YOUR PUZZLEMENT SHUT OUT WHILE THEY KEPT BARKING,

Standing silent watching
all the others stoned me
your silent stone cast the worst damage

Sheer Terror