ROADSIDE LOVRS

ROADSIDE LOVRS

A Poem by Saddam

At the road side 
When he sat and see 
Lovely face and body pretty 
His imagination ride. 

Eyes on girl 
Inspecting and connecting with them 
And excitement about their name 
Want to unfurl. 

A beautiful curve 
Someone is good, someone have big pigtail 
Someone"s glass on her nose, how can he tell? 
But right now he love. 

By general or enviously 
Anyone, when looked at him for a moment 
He blither ' it is my attainment" 
Wish to keep entity. 

Right away he reveal 
Marvelous untouchable love and summoned 
His heart, frantically for her, moaned 
And try to heal.  

After a certain hour 
When all road side lovers abut at place 
Make own enormous victorious palace 
And feel overseeing power.

© 2014 Saddam


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A nice write, a bit sad, but lovely in its flow and emotions :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear.........
nice keep it up :),one suggestion is look at the words instead of see saw would've been nice,but if it's delibrately done no problem.go on write more :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear friend.....
A light hearted poem..fine write! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear....
Oh, this is beautiful! I love it. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


I see what you're themes are and applaud the effort here. Very touching and beautiful ideas and imagery that could be compelling.

NOTES: For me, the grammatical and language issues detract from the intent of the poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is beautiful. Very much so.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

10 Years Ago

thanks dear for stopping by
This is lovely my friend .Well said :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

10 Years Ago

thank you very much dear friend for your lovely comment. thanks.
Vidya Bacchus

10 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
a touching read really, courage and bright sentiment shines through.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

10 Years Ago

thank you very much dear friend for your feedback.
This is a lovely read. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

10 Years Ago

thank you very much dear poet...your words are such a magic. Love you.
Distinction b/w various types of girls is shown nicely. Beautiful write..

Posted 10 Years Ago


Saddam

10 Years Ago

Lovely to hear that sir....thanks sir
Penny

10 Years Ago

Ur welcum.

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Saddam
Saddam

RASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India



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