PROMISES

PROMISES

A Poem by Saddam


PROMISES


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Today

Last day

Still coming day

I have my promises

With you for my happiness

Though without you I’m loneliness

Promise, live with your wound of betray

Promise, live without you as wind of eerie

Promise for remembering you in my rescue, maze, cry.

© 2014 Saddam


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Nice format of writing, Saddam! I like it and the expressions too.

I am little confused with the last line... rescue, maze (?), cry ( may be some other word here?)

In eight line, don't you think wound of betrayal sounds better? Unless you want to go with the flow :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear...



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A beautiful write, full of promise indeed. Love the style and arrangement. Amazing :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much sweet friend.
great style.. I enjoyed...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear
Format is beautiful, it provides a character to your work or rather say the promises you have such lovingly made. Nice write Saddam.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear friend..
I like this tomb format. :D
The last three you featured how we live with broken promises. Beautifully expressed. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear.
Nice format of writing, Saddam! I like it and the expressions too.

I am little confused with the last line... rescue, maze (?), cry ( may be some other word here?)

In eight line, don't you think wound of betrayal sounds better? Unless you want to go with the flow :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear...
Perhaps I've missed the mark but at the moment this left me a bit confused. My mind isn't feeling the words linking cohesively - likely its just me... sorry.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Honest review and don't need to be sorry...
Nice one Saddam! Really liked this one :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear.
good one Saddam, indeed a Promise pyramid for each day

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear
a sweet one:-)nice write..

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear
Lovely structure...delight to read ♥

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear.

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