BEST DAY WITH A STRANGER

BEST DAY WITH A STRANGER

-SADDAM HUSEN

Do you had remember?

With different bowl of coffee in December

We met with each other.

 

 I was in distress while

You are in exult

Your stupidity makes me a little bit smile.

 

Then eye to eye contact

Your dare of frank conduct

You came close to me, said-“ma’am wants long drive?”

 

I was familiar face

You was single visit her

For next reaction, pair’s eyes were on us.

 

Amateur words revert my life

Without think, walked for drive

Best day which I have spend with stranger.

 

Your energy and prancing nature

I forgot all my linger

Every moment I enjoy of a stranger.

 

Strange, stranger no longer remain

You are my best man

The cafeteria change me and my element.

Reviews

[Da Leigh]

The following sentences do not make sense.

"Do you had remember?" I'm not clear on what you are trying to say here. You might want to take out the word had or possibly write, "Do you even remember?"

"Your stupidity makes me a little bit smile." Instead you could write, "Your stupidity makes me smile a bit."

There are a few other errors as well. If you would like help on this please let me know. Keep up the good work.

[Penny]

Very nice poem. What else i can say it just turns the atmosphere 'pink' . Well done.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Really nice Ssaad .Your poems always are :)

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear friend for what you have said. Appreciate your words.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Saheli]

I don't know why, but there seems to be quite a lot of grammatical errors in this.

[Saddam]

thanks for watching my weakness...if you point out i'll be fitted them.

[Brook]

So beautiful. A magical write, great job.

[Saddam]

thank you for this beautiful comment and encouraging me.

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful encounter and maybe love...Bravo...............

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear sir... i'm glad.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).................