RIDE FOR A GHOST LAND

RIDE FOR A GHOST LAND

 

Unfortunately one day, with my thought second

I made a trip for ghost land.

 

The worst place in the world for living

But I want to feel that wind for short moving.

 

I put on bags in my red vehicle

And start it for ride four hundred miles.

 

That was a dull place surrounded with west leafs

It seems the vampires lived here in a grand relief.

 

I am liberalise by thought and brave by heart

And I entered with the appetite great

Into the door having no escort;

 

There was semi gloom and unkempt skull

Many unknown insects were flying and crawling

Hard was taking breath or made exult.

Some dribbles water fell on me

And a purr appeared from some where

I sensed a shadow with sharpen cannon behind me

I feel sweats on forehead and I was null.

 

With my throbbing heart and unwinked eyes

I turned, someone firmly clutched my neck

I shut down my coming out eyes

And a gaped mouth without any sound.

 

I feel lack of air in my lungs

Without any control I start to whereat the shadow

I opened my eyes and saw�"

My fan was slowly moving with sound queer

Same time wall clock bang 2 am.

Reviews

[Mary Steffen]

Well it is a little bit different than what I am used to of reading of poetry. I didn't know that you can submit a paper on this sight. It's very creative and I like the writing of the poem. You write with good feeling and keep
up the work. It is very nice but a little scary.

[Saddam]

Very thanks to you dear friend....

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Interesting read, very creative indeed.

Kaze~

[Oyindamola Shoola]

you painted the picture of the scary ghost land with your poem, nice...well done

It looks very much like my notebook.. minus the occasional smears of peanut butter. The poem itself, definitely was a haunting ride. Very nice job..

[Kasey Miriam]

wonderful poem! verry well written and to top it off top knotch penmenship!

[Jack Kennedy]

Interesting! Very different and the pictures are a nice touch too. Nice job.

[Penny]

Nice presentation and hats off iif thats your handwriting. Now about the poem it is different and the dark element in it made me like it, though I desperately longed for a twist (comic one) at the end which didn't come. Still its good the way it is

[Stefanie Holmes]

I like that you did something different with submitting the pages of a notebook, but it may be easier to read if you also upload a typed version on the site. I did like the poem though! :)

~Stefanie

[Vivian]

Can you upload a typed version, please?
Thanks.
:)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Creepy Interesting hard to read but got what you were saying.



Thank you for sharing this interesting piece.


Blessings. kindred poetry

[Frieda P]

Oooh, intense for a dream, I found it a bit difficult to read but it well worth it Ssadd!

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear and sweet friend...