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Half Baked Heart

Half Baked Heart

A Poem by Saddam
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A fight between heart and desire

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Second step 
Towards me; naked 
With a heart of half baked 
Want to do it 
But afraid too. 

She want me 
But love him so much 
She is about to reach 
Yet, don't want it
Other side; want to do. 

Come, I Love You 
I never do it without you 
You are my love 
I know what I have to deserve 
So, listen your heart 
Don't come up in part.

© 2016 Saddam



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Kim
I like the message you're conveying. The uncertainty and hesitation is well shown. I also like the contrast between the two personalities in your poem; one is torn, uncertain of what to do or what she wants, the other knows not only what is desired but also what is deserved. Well done! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much.



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Kim
I like the message you're conveying. The uncertainty and hesitation is well shown. I also like the contrast between the two personalities in your poem; one is torn, uncertain of what to do or what she wants, the other knows not only what is desired but also what is deserved. Well done! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much.
Choices define the human life. This is a great poem about duality and choice. It is told from teh inner mind and that makes it feel personal. I liked it. I would only suggest toning a few words to make it more readable. Ultimately, you hit the points that mattered.

Posted 2 Years Ago


duality & love do not go together. Someone is left hurt or both are left unsatisfied

Posted 2 Years Ago


duality & love do not go together. Someone is left hurt or both are left unsatisfied

Posted 2 Years Ago


i love it !!!! it rhymes very great !!!
good job

Posted 2 Years Ago


Sorry it took so long to read this....the old tug o war with ones heart...I love it

Posted 2 Years Ago


There should be no duality in love. Well expressed my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear...
You have portrayed this struggle marvelously. Glad to see you back...:)..................

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Sir.
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

You are welcome....^)))))
am thrilled by what this work portray,,,your great

Posted 2 Years Ago


A person can only give himself/herself up completely in any given situation only when they don't have the reluctance in their heart. Nicely portrayed.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear friend.

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RASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India



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