six things

six things

A Poem by Safrina

1.Your hair parts
like the grass
on a wet day.
2.I have not seen
your hair
part in a while.
3.The bird bath
dances under
the snow
4.And the
rubbish sways,
too
5.How can I
sway?
6.Your hair parts
like the sea.

© 2011 Safrina



Author's Note

Safrina
i can never hide my surprise.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I love how you can put a whole story into the perspective of one view yet not see it lose it's other characters, even though it is told by one personality, which in turn is manipulated to say a whole different thing entirely with the words, all to get back to that one story, that in the end is just saying one thing.

I love your writing? :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

Interesting and you bought smile...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Six things are six surprises...Thank you for penning...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Haz said it just right
It's really beautiful it truly is
so personal and concise and involved
so transcendent

ur work always humbles me

I've always been in awe of ur beauty inside and out

I'm in pain atm..but I'm no less in awe..I'm just deep in the sea and I need moses and jesus and you to come rescue me..or maybe I should just search the soul of this expansive sea and leave people alone for a while

you've captured something amazing..something so beautiful you feel every cell in ur body urging u to look away

that's good poetry..stuff that makes u truly feel

sometimes I only feel like I've accomplished something when I write a poem that makes me cry while writing it and after

so yea, trying to stay objective here

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how you can put a whole story into the perspective of one view yet not see it lose it's other characters, even though it is told by one personality, which in turn is manipulated to say a whole different thing entirely with the words, all to get back to that one story, that in the end is just saying one thing.

I love your writing? :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

370 Views
4 Reviews
Added on August 21, 2011
Last Updated on August 21, 2011

Author

Safrina
Safrina

Birmingham, United Kingdom



About
kisses on the neck and writing rules my life and determinsim is a b***h but me and her made a deal so it's all good now. in fact, shes doing a lot of great things for me. Take down the lo.. more..

Writing
amy amy amy amy amy amy

A Poem by Safrina