Is This Me?

An isolated island is my place

A moonless night is where am I

A yellow paled flower is my face

In the shade of dead grass I lie.

 

A ghost hunted cemetery is my heart

A gloomy sky is my soul

A dried fruit is my body

tasteless as a whole

 

Frustrated

Devastated

Dejected

Downhearted

 

Thats what you made me

 

 

But for you to know

I wont stay so low

 

Hope I'll see you soon

With every shining star with the moon

 

Faith I'll find you for sure

A fake smile is my way to cure

 

Thank you for what you done

Tried to destroy me...

But I AM NOT THE ONE.....

Author's Note

I am not a professional.
I just try to pure my heart by writing out and words flow alone.
I like to let my feelings flow alone though sometimes it makes my poem weak, but i dont like to change in it...

Thanks everyone for reading and reviewing.
Thanks for the encouragement

Reviews

[Arielle Ann]

well you needn't be a professional to write a poem...what you need are emotions...technical clarity will come with time...and I think you have done a perfect job..."An isolated island is my place
A moonless night is where am I
A yellow paled flower is my face
In the shade of dead grass I lie.
A ghost hunted cemetery is my heart
A gloomy sky is my soul
A dried fruit is my body
tasteless as a whole"-the rich metaphor you used just enhanced the visages you painted!

[Onku Ghosh]

Superb write!! Language is simple but very effective.....you have maintained the rhyme scheme as well.Very well done.Will read you other poems soon someday.

[Sahar moonlight]

Thank you! glad to hear that :)

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is beautifully written. Very intriguing and personal, something with which I can relate myself to :)

[Melissa Perry]

I really like this. An it's speeks volumes. An keep writing with the heart c

[Nath]

The metaphors are beautiful, as is the poem itself. I like the way the hopelessness conveyed in the first part contrasts with the strong will to get up again - I particularly liked the last line, I think the capital letters contribute greatly to make their meaning stand out powerfully.
Being one who thinks meaning is most important, I don't think just letting your feelings flow makes it "weak", but, quite the contrary, strong, because what is stronger than emotions?
I see no need to change it one bit. Keep writing and practicing your skills!

[Sarah Redigan]

love everything about it

[Amata Luna]

The way you played with words have been very well done. This is just intriguing and beautiful at the same time. Encouraging yet under lies a deeper meaning for everyone. Can't explain it though but my imagination can. What a vivid expression of heart!

[Ms.Bri]

..The words you have spoken in this poem are deep a person can literally feel your emotion and that's beautiful. Your so deep and hope you keep writing because I will keep reading. Amazing!

[Ami N.]

So full of emotions...a very deep and soulful write. Amazing piece.

[Sujash I. Purna]

"A ghost hunted cemetery is my heart
A gloomy sky is my soul
A dried fruit is my body
tasteless as a whole"

the perfect expression of a dejected soul...I really loved it...It speaks a lot to me you know...
Keep it up!

[Priscilla Sayers]

A deeply emotional poem. A question and an answer. A heart pure and well spoken.