sky's feelings

sky's feelings

A Poem by Sahar moonlight
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Although Winter is my favourite season but this is how i felt the sky

"

 

 

A turquoise shining sheet
Studded with shining white pearls so neat
forming shapes of life

A sign of happiness and peace
Staring at its lovely face my heart please
To continue my way without strife

One day I woke up very early
Sad and gloomy appears clearly
Black monsters fight to cover

It was feeling blue and turning grey
When a flash crushed it and split half way
Its good times were over

Lightning beating it continuously
Ripped its soul so cruelly
As thunder scolded it after all

Living that hard and tough time couldn't bare anymore
Its heart was mercilessly tore
Tears gathered in its eyes and began to fall

Everyone was happy with rain
I wondered how happiness was a result of its pain
I turned my head away
Soaked in rain I shared its tears

 

 


© 2012 Sahar moonlight



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First of all, I love the gradual change from blue to black, it's a real eye-catcher and goes great with the theme!
It's very interesting how you personify the sky and compare the weather to moods.
Usually metaphors are used the other way round and this change was really refreshing.
Then I really like the contrast between the sky's pain caused by the thunder storm that leads to rain that waters the earth and is welcomed there because it enables the life the clouds in the sky try to mirror when the sky is "happy", by making the sky sad.
In my opinion, it completes the cycle.
Excellent poem!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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There's a certain deepness here within your words.
I can feel then thunder through out the soul.
Simply wonderful.

Posted 5 Years Ago


An interesting poem. I love to watch the sky .. you have portrayed it very nicely in here .. really beautiful :))

Posted 5 Years Ago


Beautiful poem excellent word use. Awesome work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Amazing rhyme scheme. Amazing. Just amazing. Everything was just there. Simple in words but just "god-like" in description. I always like to think of rain as tears....
Neat finish to nature's cycle.

*100*

YT,

Summer

Posted 5 Years Ago


Terrific! I really liked the way you made the rain be from tears in the sky and all. It was really great.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hmm, very dramatic, very deep. :3 I really like the imagery you incorporated, and the color of the text as well as the pictures made reading your poem all the more enjoyable! :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful writting very good and very enjoyable to read thank you for sharing

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A truly excellent take on the weather,
And as though the clouds have emotions
And a soul
Terrific :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


I love this poem, and the personification of the sky.
You made the sky look as if it was crying in pain by the "black monsters" storm clouds.
The way you changed the color of the words was quite interesting as well, and it goes so nicely with the words. :)
This is such a refreshing poem. It's going straight into my favorites; and I don't have too many works in my favorites box. (only 2). Good job on this poem! It's really amazing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


What a poetic description! Looking through the words, I don't see the sky but rather a person "mirroring" their feelings on how the sky goes. Whether up or low, sunny or in rain. You did great in here. Congrats in a nice piece.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sahar moonlight
Sahar moonlight

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Hello everybody. Here is Sahar. I am from Lebanon living in France. I'm a mathematician but sometimes I find in myself the will to write something. I enjoy reading a lot and I was glad to join this.. more..

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