You Came to Me

You came to me when you were more important than the beating heart.

Wonder,

how I survived,

I walked,

I fought,

When,

it was dark a dark path, 

a silent road, 

an empty me, 

a tasteless joke, 

a bad dream, 

an awful quote, 

when it wasn't me,

You came to me,

like dawn,

breaking iniquity, 

You came to me, 

when, 

a horrible sky, 

haunting thoughts, 

with shattered breaths, 

and shattered me, 

You came to me, 

in the desperate need, 

falling me, 

when, 

I was giving in, 

following an unknown circle, 

searching for a single drop,

of unknown thirst, 

that keeps me just, 

alive and awake, 

in sucked wounds,

 

You came to me, 

my last hope, 

my last resort, 

my trembled smile, 

like God's help, 

like cool breeze, 

like simple laugh, 

like a calm heart, 

like a deal for none, 

You came to me,

like everything, 

but something new,

Oh!

You wonder, 

how I survived, 

I broke, 

I stole every breath,

in search of you, 

You came to me, 

in the desperate need, 

You came to me.

Author's Note

Please feel free to express..

Reviews

[Kes]

I love this! Maybe a few too many commas, but definitely worth the read.
Great work. :)
K

[Barbara Walker]

Fourth stanza is my favorite! Great write!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Excellent expression. Needs a little bit of editing, but overall nice job. Simple and effective.

[anxia]

'searching for a single drop of unkown thirst'what a line!!!i love it!

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is very powerful and written from heart. I like your choice of words and simply, your imagery. Yeah, a true friend comes when you need him the most, and you expressed your feelings very well. I can see that you wanted to get it all out of you, and there's truth behind those verses. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D

[Pencrafter]

Your poem evokes a breathless, almost panicked feel. I get a mental picture of someone barely surviving an terrible accident, helped and nurtured by a friend. A true friend is there when you need them. Interesting poem.

[Lily Mae]

This is just amazing... I love the repetitive flow and and it reaches out and grabs the readers attention...let alone emotions..x well penned..xo

[.]

I love the repetition of " you came to me" . It really throws jabs at your audience. Thanks for the read request, Maan. It is truly a pleasure.

[MOON]

Poignant wrIte love how ou used you came to me like dawn breaking iniquity. Beautiful

[Mockingbird]

it's a lucky person to have a true friend be there and comfort you when you hit rock bottom. really expresses what the person means to you. great poem.