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G O N E !

G O N E !

A Poem by Sammi
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My 1st Free Style poem promised my teacher Richard before Chrismas but I'm a forlorn mess this time of year.

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G  O   N   E   !


No tenderness of now

upon my sad brow,

nor warmth of

your breath.


Many a night

my heart’s drifted

to bright days bygone,

dreams lingering ’til death.


Each moment’s embrace

by dark’s lonely grip

felt my heart’s pain

of your last days;

oh, I’d not see

your loving

manly face

e’er again.


Life’s a’spin,

it’s a daze I’m in,

I’ll be much stronger

on each beat of the drum.


Swallows grow still,

clouds no longer

beckoned from

high sunlit skies,

sad tears overflowing

from these colorless eyes;

an Afghan bullet scored a kill.


© 2018 Sammi



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This is what i call beautiful sadness, Sammi - your pain breaks from the words as if trying to find a hiding place.You've laid your thoghts so gently yet this reader feels the stuttering of your heart beat.

(forgive my typos, rushing in case connection went.) x

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

6 Months Ago

Your sweetness is like no others emmajoy so gently touching my heart, this poem was very hard to wri.. read more



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Amazing use of words and thoughts my friend.
Many a night
my heart’s drifted
to bright days bygone,
dreams lingering ’til death."
Thank you Sammi for shairng the outstanding poetry.
Coyote


Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

4 Months Ago

And thank you Coyote with love for your beautiful words to me about my poem -- you are a prince! :)<.. read more
Coyote Poetry

4 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome Sammi.
Oh the sadness of loss and having to let go- sometimes hard to accept the present moment but that which is dear and special to us will always leave an empty chalice that nothing can replace- wonderful words🌹

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

5 Months Ago

Golly Thoughts In Time two reviews in a row is really something special to get from one person and s.. read more
Rose Petal&#127801;

5 Months Ago

Much of a pleasure and I love your words- love straight back at you in a double dose- enjoy🌹
Well, Sammi,
What a splendidly hearttouching surprise … I thought you'd forgotten your assignment.
How wonderful to see you didn't.
Though, not a Free Verse composition, this Free Style piece is more brilliantly rendered than your olde teacher could have expected … I am truly amazed by the quality and degree of poetic skill you repeatedly display upon the page.
There is no doubting how diligently you delved into the book on grammar and punctuation I recommended, too, as your acumen shows with remarkable clarity in every line and verse, and that picture is pristinely perfect, as is the uniquely creative design of your title … I am more than pleasantly stunned!
Sammi, I know the depth of pain and sorrow that is blended into the ink that composed this wonderfully sad, beautifully crafted piece, in loving homage to your fallen husband on the field of battle, while defending America, Afghanistan, and the world from those who would otherwise spread terror across the globe and steal our hard-won freedoms, ending our quality of life.
Bless your brave man, and all those like him, who serve and have served our country, who fight and have fought for freedom and justice for the entire world, and bless You for your own dear sacrifice.

May you be blessed in all you do … it is an honor to be your friend and humble teacher.
Take a bow for skillfully creating and expressing this enthralling, emotional, and deeply touching virtual masterpiece.
A thousand golden stars to thee✨ ⁓ Richard

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

6 Months Ago

Aw Richard you know I would not forget anything you told me I was just trying to keep myself togethe.. read more
Richard

6 Months Ago

Dear Sammi,
I'll never be disappointed in you and I'll always understand your plight, M'Dear... read more
Sammi

6 Months Ago

Crying again! ;)
my sweet Sammi, I'm sorry I've missed this when it was posted, I know what You've needed is some little of love and kind warmth, War is never easy, never will be, not now, or in the past, or ever, never easy on any one, You have my tears my dear, You the least deserve our sincere tears, not only for Your pain and sadness but also for those who can read through Your emotively touching words the real meaning of Wars, Your style and the presentation from the title to the shape of Your poem, add a more tender but also strong touch of Your pain, raising and falling, fading and appearing, like waves, like how You are feeling Your life is like, Your tittle, the way it appears, gives me this feeling of great shock, deep yet tender pain, the fading and death, the calling with no response, very very brilliantly done in my mind's eyes, I feel You my dear... ever bless You for this woman You amazingly truly are...

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

6 Months Ago

Gee darling Light no one seems to know what I'm really and truly feeling and need but you and that i.. read more
Light

6 Months Ago

I'm not a teacher dear Sammi, nor an expert in poetry, but in my mind's eyes Your poem is more than .. read more
Sammi

6 Months Ago

Thank you sweet Light I -- may take you up on that offer! :)

HUGGS!
Sammi
I really enjoyed this piece Sammi. gentle thoughts what gets next to me.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

6 Months Ago

ROXANE you really make me smile with your enjoyment and to know you can feel the emotion in my words.. read more
This is what i call beautiful sadness, Sammi - your pain breaks from the words as if trying to find a hiding place.You've laid your thoghts so gently yet this reader feels the stuttering of your heart beat.

(forgive my typos, rushing in case connection went.) x

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sammi

6 Months Ago

Your sweetness is like no others emmajoy so gently touching my heart, this poem was very hard to wri.. read more

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I'm not really new here, I've just been gone for awhile. I think poetry is a gift from the soul the mind and the heart -- meant to learn well and share with all. I'm a 41 year old widow and a wo.. more..

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