The war has begun

With wings black as night

He soared high in the sky

His pride shining bright

As he watched us all die

The last one falls silently and alone

And his fallen take flight

Glowing silver his lead is spoken

His followers make sure

The dead arent woken

They sang their song

Loud and proud

They make sure nothing goes wrong

Theres writing in the halls

Its written in bloody red

Its dripping down the walls

And its pointing to the dead

The fallen will avenge

The angels rising again

Bringing the dead back

With a lycanthrope pack

The last of our kind

One stands firm

Hes ready to fight

Making the dark one squirm

He strikes with all his might

Power surges through his viens

Black and bloody as the world

He mas made his claim

The war has begun

The beasts come out

Millions against just one

Author's Note

Ive wanted to write a fallen angel poem for a while... n ive finally done it!! thoughts? with help from a friend

Reviews

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

"Power surges through his veins" I think that this was a very good line and i liked this part of it the most! The poem kind of confused me as i was reading it but as you get towards the end it made more since and i like that! It leaves confusion which makes you want to read more and more and than by the end of the poem you understand. I think that you did well with this one :)

[xSamilynnx]

thank you!!!!

[Matt M.]

Very descriptive word choice. It makes a powerful and emotional impact towards the reader. I like it. Good Job.

[Rachael32123]

Great job! It's dark yet mystical I like it :)

[5minutesofcrazy]

Beautiful. The tone of the poem is hauntingly breathtaking. Very simple, yet very moving. I like the structure, it keeps the reader going through at a decent clip. The only thing I might even suggest is clarifying the rythme scheme to be constant. Other than that, really good.

[quarintine_deathangel]

Great job! you might want to switch up and play with the words though. It'll interest the reader more and vary the context into a deeper and darker tone. Thankyou for writing! ^^

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. I wanted to read more. I like the storyline and the feel of darkness and battle to come. Strong description brought the reader into the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Tomislav Petricevic]

This is so beautiful! Dark & awesome. I just love angels! And your expressions are really good, they make the story truly excellent. :D
How come I didn't notice this poem up until now?

[MoonlitAngel]

Definitely an amazing poem. It's got amazing imagery. There's a few grammar mistakes, but hey... Writing is about freedom... Why limit yourself to the "rules of writing"? Absolutely fantastic detail. I could see it all. You're very talented.

[Hiddenfire]

I love it! Big fan of fallen angel mythology esp. if it's new or different, and the idea of one vs. a pack of werewolves is not only new it's very intriguing! I like the form that you used for this piece and the images are vivid and practically lend themselves to the bloody battle that is unfolding. Really cool.
a few typo's here that are mainly just adding some apostrophes, like: "The dead arent woken" to the word aren't, and here:

"Theres writing in the halls
Its written in bloody red
Its dripping down the walls
And its pointing to the dead"

To the words There's and all three It's.
and here:

"Hes ready to fight
Hes saying 'sup
He grabs a knife"

to all three He's.

"But a wolf bights down" bite's is misspelled and lastly: "Cutting its throat" With the word it's.
I liked it a bunch and looking forward to reading more from you!