A dream that won't come true!

A child stretches her hand

Out of the window pane,

Touches,

The stumbling droplet...

After the shower

And asks

“Daddy, why it rains?”

He has no answer,

This time…

For his bereaved heart,

Couldn't feel that rain,

Anymore!

Only if they meander

From his eyes!

He hide his tears,

And smiles

And caresses his child,

He points to

The blue firmament,

And replies

“The stars must have 

Lost their toys, my child

And hence they cry,

And it rains!”

She wonders…

Her little fingers still wet…

Soon falls asleep

And dreams about her mom…

(And the wind brought

That drizzle again…)

Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"

2:30 am, 8th September, 2013

Photo credits:

http://www.artmajeur.com/files/machaon/images/artworks/650x650/6878254_2013-60x40-soloist-oil-canvas.jpg

http://www.designzzz.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/04/Rain_of_stars_by_Mar_ka-600x800.jpg

http://webneel.com/sites/default/files/images/project/Beautiful%20painting%20-%20A%20boy%20is%20playing%20in%20rain%20water.jpg

Author's Note

For this dream, which won't come true!
And the laughter, that just left you!
(Four months without you, Mom,
I can't help myself,
The rain always brought to me,
The message,
that you are here,
Yes, somewhere...
Mom, I miss you)

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Touching. Yes, Life has its losses that can't be replaced. There are sad hard truths. But may you find peace. I'd like to point you to a powerful poem, that I found helpful and which I read at my Mother's celebration of life ceremony. It is a rewrite by me of a popular poem by Mary Frye, and can be found at http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/rpuetter/634259/. I hope this is comforting. It was for me.

Best regards,

Rick

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

The best poem. I loved it. Thanks Rick.

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
Thought provoking and a mover of ones pneuma, I am in aw!

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thank you.

[Emily B]

a stunning, heart-rending write

thank you for inviting me to it

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

*Smiles* thank you

[Rene Velez]

a good write indeed, well done

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thanks Rene :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i understood the loss in it...and i feel there is enough...but then i like abstract...i like to be able to fill in missing parts...just me...but i felt this deeply.

jacob

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thank you. This poem may lack in its form and structure, but has a lot to do with my feelings. Thanks for understanding, Jacob.

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine write, is... why it rains ?... written intentionally, or do you mean Why does it rain ?.. ( I know , I am an old fuddy... please forgive me...)

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thanks. It's done deliberately. And you are awesome :) for you noticed it. Thank you once again.

[Dayran]

Sanjeeta ... its a touching poem but I can't help feeling that its missing in parts and does not give a complete picture.

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thanks Dayran. I just thought to make it incomplete, something that will require to think and recreate the images in mind. I knowingly distorted the flow, for I myself can't explain the feeling further...

[Dayran]

Its the art of poetry dear ... if there's something important in that way, you need to try ... its why we are here. Allowing your readers free rein may actually distort what you might want to say.

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

True. But some outburst remains special if they are incomplete. Unlike rest of my poems, here I thought to represent the incompleteness I have in myself. The incompleteness of thoughts! and the incompleteness of the pain, that no one can define. Its painful. Anyway, thank you Dayran. Accept this one as the way it is. I will soon fantasize the other one. :) Apology.

[Dayran]

No need to apologize

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

:) Thanks Dayran