Dance in this storm

Dance in this storm

A Poem by LazerRays
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Dance with me in this rain, The downpour will be the tempo...

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Dance with me in this rain,
Just you and me, 
 The downpour will be the tempo, 
And the thunder, the drums, 
 The lighting shall be paparazzi, 
 You can be the lead singer, 
And I'll hum along, 
Spin me around, 
 While the wind cheers us on, 
Whistling and yelling, 
Spin me in this turmoil, 
Dance with me in this storm

© 2020 LazerRays


Author's Note

LazerRays
If its a revolution without dancing,
Its a revolution not worth having

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i like the message of the poem it uplifts one's spirit that despite the ill weather such as rain and storm we can still find happiness especially when shared with someone special

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you sette!
I really like this one. Whimsical, mysterious, and I'm a sucker for all things nature-related to try and express emotion and intent. Nice work

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you strife! A pleasure, as always!
To dance in the rain is a delight. As is this poem

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thanks lyn! But the delight it you! ;)
sounds romantic,dancing in the rain bare foot

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thanks for commenting workman!
 wordman

5 Years Ago

you`re welcome
How wonderful to dance in the rain...I like stomping through the puddles in my boots myself. My daughter and I went out one day to do just that...stomping through puddles in our boots and raincoats. The lightning and thunder would have driven us inside though. When I was a kid I used to climb trees in thunderstorms. But now I have to be the safety patrol. :) Great read.

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you!
I like this Sarah. It has worked really well weaving the motion of the wind and the storm to portray the rhythm of the dance. The thunder is the drums is one of many good images..
Good work.
All the best.
Alan

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you! You're so kind!
This kind of weather does quicken the pace and bring about a need to dissipate some energy. Sounds like a perfectly good monsoon dance to me. Great piece!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to comment :)
This is so vivid and electric, I can feel the rain on my skin... as for painting a picture this is one of the most well-crafted poems I've seen. Excellent, excellent job. I wonder, though- do your poems like this require a lot of thought, or do these just come out all in one burst?

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

It comes out in a burst :) il accidentally Say a line in my head and boom! I type away to craft a po.. read more
Stormy love can be exciting and a spontaneous event between couples - great poetic interpretation in wonder wordplay and stanza flow! :-)

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your comment! Love has it's storms and often that ends a lot of relationships. I just .. read more
A duet in the midst of a romantic rainfall. So beautiful. As lovely as a poem as I ever read...


Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you! You're so kind! I was thinking of dancing through a problem in a relationship. Dancing th.. read more

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