Dead Eyes

Psychotic version of perspectives and POVs... In a disturbing manner

I love those dead eyes
Looking back at me,
The power I feel,
Because they will never deny me,

Dead eyes not moving,
Staring into me,
The proudness I feel,
Because they will never defy me,

Dead eyes without will,
Thats the way a man should be,
Immobilized by my blade,
Crying out to me,

Beg for mercy, 
You're just another set of lies,
Just a drug, just a pill,  
Just another pair of dead eyes,

I won't stop this rage of blood,
Till I'm invisible to these highs,
Till every perception of me is gone,
Till you're all only dead eyes

Author's Note

Idk. I just heard the words 'dead eyes' in my head (siiigghhh yes, I hear things... Lovely side affect of bipolar) and was like "i like that"

Reviews

[Pete]

wow. powerful. they say that the eyes are the mirrors of the soul - this one starkly revealing. if our eyes could talk, would what they say? there's a dark-side scariness to this ... :)

[LazerRays]

Thank you, mine probably are creepy. I like being scary; that means a lot! Thanks for stopping by with such An awesome reviews!

[brokenwriter]

Thats f*****g goooood. I really love it

[LazerRays]

Your review is f*****g good hahahahah! Thank you! Youre much appreciated!!!!

[Onlyme]

Sometimes the darkness and our imagination and how we are feeling deep inside. Can conjure up images and sensations, let alone feelings and apparitions and makes us see things. Because we are so upset, in turmoil and stressed out. Outwith lack of sleep on top. A very vivid open poem. Expressing how you feel. So sorry to hear how it affects you. But maybe these eyes. Are hurt, pain, anxiety and frustration. Of the pain and suffering, you feel inside.

[LazerRays]

Thank you dawn for stopping by! Yeah, i guess thats what makes a dead eye. Hurt. Some inhumane i guess. Well thanks again for your review! Much appreciated!

[Onlyme]

Hope you find comfort in expressing yourself Sarah. As others do listen and care and your very welcome. sweetheart hugs Dawn.

[LazerRays]

Thank you dawn, youre sweet! Hugs back!

[Onlyme]

my pleasure Sarah, anytime. you need a chat or someone to listen or even care. Or want a moan. Just message me anytime okay. Mean that . Dawn.

[emmajoy]

Seems the night has stayed with you. created something so vile, it sticks! Risen fight back, aim never to surrender, lurk in the dark, no hiding. face what might be real, might be imagined. Might be conquered. Pergaps? Written at a crazy pace, read both quickly and slowly. - there's uniqueness threaded through .

' Beg for mercy .. You're just another ' another nothing. Perhaps.

[LazerRays]

Thank you! Ive always been a bit of a night owl anyway hahaha. Thank you for the wonderful review! Very much appreciated! :D

[Perdition]

Lovely "side effect" of being not only a poet but an artiste. This one reaches me like revenge or avenging but not just that curtain is drawn but also a backdrop of hurt and leering on that emotional scale..well that is the emotion pulled here for me at least. If looks could corrupt or words kill than certainly this would be a registered weapon.

"till every perception of me is gone"...now that is way beyond the rest...that is a wealth in a bankrupt world..You pulled us in and made us learn our death righteously to earn your rightful want of burned out facade . Such a sly trap we walked into when we bit into this one.
Now if you'll excuse me I must go bleed out slowly for the side effects and drama as you would have it no other way...
"CRUEL WORLD..Limp..Stagger.. A hand over the chest as a last look back wearily and ashen at the betrayal". Thank you for the early morning death...always a pleasure to be killed again and again in the side effects of poetics. THUD!..annnnnnd corpse. "SCENE!". ;)

[LazerRays]

hahahahahahahaha! somehow your reviews always get better and better. thats certainly a scene right there. are you an actor? if not- go! hollywood is waiting for you! thanks for your review as per usual! have a great day!

[Perdition]

Alright ..Alright..Mind if I at least grab my toothbrush.lol. Thanks and back at ya.

[Wesley Dingler]

DAMN! If only it had a musical melody, this would be something of a murder ballad. I like murder ballads done well.
This is done very well. Except for the fact that it seems you want to kill everyone. Which is cool, except that would include me, too.
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I love you dark eye, Sara. It reminds me of how I used to write. Only you do it better now than I ever did then.
Thank you for challenging my mind.
And my conscience.


-wes

[LazerRays]

Thank you wes! Hahaha it does seem like i wanna kill everyone- but luckily its just a symbolism for judging and hating others opinions. Im kinda bias. I like my opinion and lash out at the others. Hence why i used eyes cause thats what we see with... Dead eyes=dead opinions... Eh. So dont worry i wont kill you!

[Wesley Dingler]

I gathered the dead eyes, dead opinions metaphor, and i thought I was on to something. I loved it.read moreI gathered the dead eyes, dead opinions metaphor, and i thought I was on to something. I loved it.
Anymore darkies you've got stashed away?

[LazerRays]

Hahahahhaha ive got plenty darkies... I just have them scattered around. You might have to travel through some thoughtful poetry but i can recommend "these tears were never mine" if youd like

[Wesley Dingler]

I'm plundering through them now. I don't write dark much anymore, just don't really feel it at age 33. But I still love reading dark done well.

[LazerRays]

Eh youre never too old to stop dark poetry. But i guess if you dont feel it

[Wesley Dingler]

Sara, i agree completely. I'm too old for s**t. But my mind doesn't write like that anymore. I left most of my darkness in my twenties, thank god. I had a problems in my head when I was younger that just somehow fell off as I matured. And thatr's the thing, i can always tell the fakes from the people who unleash inner darkness on the page. That's what you do. And I love it. Dark musing should be just that, it should originate from an inner darkness that cannot be faked. Some just ramble on about sad crap, and dark crap, but they don't feel it from the inside.
Thank you for correcting this for all those wannabees.

[LazerRays]

Im flattered! Im dumb founded really, thst means so much. And yes, i agree. I have this saying rhyme i made up a while ago "write what you feel so your poems may be real"
you cant fake poetry.

[Wesley Dingler]

Agreed. You can't fake art.... Period.