Companionship

The sun and the moon; star-crossed lovers that are never allowed to be together. How tragic.

There are two friends,
That never quite see,
Eye to eye,
Over land nor sea.

They're both very active,
And love to play tag,
But while one stays ahead,
The other always lags.

One is very bright,
And quite a nice lady,
She shines down her light,
While the trees make it shady.

The other is rather dark,
And dim at the most,
He lightens the night,
And makes a great host.

Selene was the sun,
And Sol was the moon,
And dawn was at dusk,
And night was at noon.

Yet they loved each other,
Both day and night,
But could never be together,
For it wouldn't be right.

So they continue to soar,
Through the skies, you see,
And they'll be that way always,
And for eternity.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I'm reading this.....and I'm liking this.....it triumphs in imagery.....and it thrives in musicality......but I can't quite get my head entirely around why Selene is the sun and Sol the moon, when it's the opposite (and, unless, I missed it, there's no indication that they're one and the same). Selene is the Moon, and Sol is the Sun. Well done!

[Katie Lynn]

Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Whenever I wrote this I purposefully mixed up their names to lend the poem a more whimsical and almost nonsensical feel. I made that whole verse opposite of what the general belief is, making the moon a more masculine figure and the sun female, instead of how they are typically represented. Thanks for the input!

[emipoemi]

I figured something was going on behind that, but if such is the case you would have to give readers a bit of a hint that such would be the case before you come to that part....have readers half expect it - not fully, for then the reveal would not be worth anything - but everything should in some subtle way point to that aspect, otherwise it's an error since, any scholar would know Selene is the moon and Sol is the sun - no questions asked.

[Tate Morgan]

he idea is a good one I think you did well

[Light]

this is lovely! the Sun and the Moon longing for one another but meant to never be together! i love the concept of this poem! it was great how you personified these 2 celestial bodies! beautifully done!

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