Acceptance

It was an early autumn morning, just as ordinary as any other. The wind flowing through my hair, whispering sweet nothings like a petty lover. The fragrance before a heavy downpour created an aura of comfort, of acceptance. How we crave to be wanted? How we wish to be loved? Yet when denied such sweet luxaries we learn to seek it in nature. How the Earth carries our burdens, our pain. How the rain hides our tears, singing lullaby's on nights when sleep is but a dream. How the sun inspires us everyday of a new hope... A new beginning.

Author's Note

Just a thought.. pls give inputs

Reviews

[Court Steed-Oldwyn]

I think you have a lot of potential as a writer! You have some great details here like the 'sweet nothings like a petty lover'. This could be much more powerful if you really dig into the images and details. Like instead of 'an early autumn morning' give us more...give details of what makes it ordinary, is it a Wednesday? (the most ordinary of days), what's the weather like, what does it look and feel like? I also love 'the fragrance before a heavy downpour' but show me more about what it really smells like and how it makes you feel. I hope this all helps! You're off to what looks like a great start! Just keep writing, writing, writing....

[Satvika : )]

Yeah.. Thank you so much. I really appreciate your constructive feedback. And I completely agree. I'll try that in my writing, see how it goes. Again, thank you! Stay happy! 😊

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Hmm...we ignore ours and yearn for other's!!
Actually earth is carrying the infinity tons of our pain like burden but doesn't utters a single complaint...but we repeatedly complaint even at a minor wound!!
Hats off to the beautiful and strong nature!! And the same to u for making us remind that😊

[Satvika : )]

Exactly!! Couldn't have put it better.
Thank you... :)

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WC Satvika😊

[Nicole]

I agree with a lot of the comments on here; this piece is beautiful and powerful, but it could be expanded. That being said, your voice is quite poetic and the words flow nicely. It's serene and calming, leaving the reader in a state of peace. I liked your symbolism, the beat of the rain as a lullaby, and the sun as hope. A suggestion for expanding would be when you mention nights when sleep is a dream, you can draw on that and put it into perspective for us. Tell us what thoughts plague the narrator's mind, and what do they look for when they walk through nature, what burdens does it carry? Like I said, beautiful piece, I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Satvika : )]

Thank you for all those encouraging words... And yes, i absolutely agree. I'll expand this piece a little more. :)

[FIN]

There is a lot of emotion here, I would of liked if you expanded more.

You also have touched on universal feelings, all humans at one point find comfort in nature's presence, which makes your message likely to come across and I feel you did well personifying Mother Earth.

(:

[Satvika : )]

Heyy thank you so much.. I'm so sorry for the late response, somehow I missed your comment. Anyways, stay happy ❤

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"How the Earth carries our burdens, our pain. How the rain hides our tears, singing lullaby's on nights when sleep is but a dream."
Deeply touching lines!! I feel connected to this.. You portray the emotions beautifully..

[Satvika : )]

Thank you so much... Your words mean a lot to me. Stay happy! ❤

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome! I wish the same for you 💜

[Court Steed-Oldwyn]

I agree about the line "How the Earth carries our burdens, our pain." This is a great line!