Crucified Heart

Crucified Heart

A Poem by Savannah Bly

Crucified Heart
She lost him forever
There were no excuses to justify
She knew it when she looked in his eyes
His heart she crucified

Her life, her choice
Who she was the night before
No thought of an "us"
Just how to heal her damaged inner core

It is weird for him
Watching her look at others
He can't make her stay either
Time for both to find new lovers

© 2014 Savannah Bly


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Another excellent write. I guess you are writing in real time. I have hard time going with your close to rhyme and excellent division of stanzas and your more expressive and professional write. I have to go with the other one and both getting shaded. That appears to be what Charley, our great leader, says from the afterlife. Sorry. You get runner up and one after that.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Than you, and yes I did. Watching my friends struggle with relationships and school and then watchin.. read more



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Love can be a fickle mistress. Knowing you are causing someone to hurt unbearably is no reason to stay together.
A well written piece. I like it.
Clive.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Thank you for another great review!
A crucifixion is intentional cruelty beyond compassion with intent to toucher, humiliate, intimidate and control.
Did you really crucify him? I think not. Yet we do give these dramatic exaggerations power in our failings. It is more like crucifying our own selves when we place such negativity on our behavior.
In the end however, over is over and dead is gone...
Interesting write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughts.
A honest and direct poem. Come a time when two people must go different directions. I like the closing line in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words!
time for each to have a resurrection of sorts...because their love was betrayed by a kiss that felt like it had lost its luster and passion...in the healing there can be no us...we have to find new lovers.
a very sad story here...but one that happens quite often.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Yes. I agree. Thank you!
Another excellent write. I guess you are writing in real time. I have hard time going with your close to rhyme and excellent division of stanzas and your more expressive and professional write. I have to go with the other one and both getting shaded. That appears to be what Charley, our great leader, says from the afterlife. Sorry. You get runner up and one after that.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Than you, and yes I did. Watching my friends struggle with relationships and school and then watchin.. read more
"She knew it when she looked in his eyes"...I love this line ! Eyes are the windows to the soul ! They speak tonnes :) I personally love this poem and the ending is so touching !..
"It is weird for him
Watching her look at others
He can't make her stay either
Time for both to find new lovers.." ! Great job ! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Hope

9 Years Ago

You are most welcome :) Good day !
Sad but true. A reality of many. A splendid poem...:).........

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Savannah Bly

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome muchly...:).....................

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Added on April 9, 2014
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Tags: heart, heart broken, lovers, relationships, betrayal, trust, crucify, forever, time, pain, damaged, empathy, inner core, life, decisions, weirdness, staying, leaving, passionate, death

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Savannah Bly
Savannah Bly

Wichita, KS



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Hi, my name is Savannah. I am originally from the West Coast but live in Kansas now. I love to write and I love to read; one of my current majors is Creative Writing. I have a blog I am restarting soo.. more..

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