The Greatness of Jesus

Do you think you have it rough?
Watch as your closest friends deny you
Only to get you arrested
Notice all of your people curse your name
As they claim they never knew you
Or have all of your people mocking you
And demanding for your death

Do you think that you are tough?
Have soldiers batter you
While everyone basks in your suffering
Wear a crown of thorns
And carry a cross to your doom
Get people to beat you mercilessly
And get trounced with a whip of thorns


Do you think that you are mistreated?
Have people take your clothes
And leave you in but your undergarments
Bear a sign above your head
That only mocks and degrades your name
Observe people laughing at your death
As your mother watches your also

Do you think you are awesome?
Die and rise three days later
And give the world a passage to paradise
Free all the good and holy spirits
And let them descend to Abraham's side
Gain the privilege to sit at God's right hand
And possess the name "savior" for eternity

Jesus sacrificed his life for me
In order to grant me salvation
He is my way, my truth, my life
And he is my very best friend
Jesus is a somebody in my eyes
I hope he's in your life
And a somebody in your eyes too

Author's Note

Please give constructive criticism.

Reviews

[Steve Clark]

Please note I am not a poet, so take this feedback in light of that.
Some thought provoking imagery used here. I could see the events of Jesus' crucifixion played out in my mind.
Although the title got my attention, it is a little jarring for a reader and doesn't quite fit with the tone of the poem until the last line. I ask what is the purpose of the poem. If you are promoting thought in your reader, I would suggest calling it Do You Think. That fits in better with the structure and style.
Limit the use of the word 'get'. We have an amazing choice of words that better capture the essence of what you are conveying.
Other than that thank you for reminding me of who I am in relation to Jesus and his sacrifice.

[Dalton Wagoner]

I will consider these points. I will probably edit the poem soon. Please keep watch on the poem so that you can see if it appears a little bit better.

[Nailah Baniti]

Peace Wagoner, you need not constructive criticism for heART, your heART is beautiful. It made me cry. I love Jesus, well, the energy it possess. I love his story, so brave. Your composition of courage is written well. I enjoyed it very much. It touched me :)

[Dalton Wagoner]

Thank you, your review touched ME 😊

[Stan Lee]

Hey Dalton. Bit of constructive criticism. I had to read it back twice before I understood the grammatical context. This might be helped if you said "Do you" at the beginning of each second line? Just a suggestion. Great poem though. Lots to think about. :)


incidentally, i was always under the impression that He was naked on the cross.

[Dalton Wagoner]

Haha, I did too for awhile. But thanks! I will fix it right now!