Mick

One of my best friends

I tell him my fears,
my dreams, my days,
my concerns and more.
He helps remove the stress
that causes the anxiety
that induces the panic attacks
which leaves me a total wreck
for not hours but days at a time.

 

But when I want time alone
he doesn’t know when it’s time
to leave me and let me be alone,
he just won’t go away.

 

He stares over my shoulder
and creeps up behind me
to creep the hell out of me,
making me cringe
from the paranoia.
He leaves me wondering
if it is worth it
to keep him around,

 

but when he turns to leave,
when I convince him its time,
the sight that I am greeted with,
the rear of his head bashed in
and his back dripping
blood and gore,
reminds me that
my uncle Mick
died in 1998.

Reviews

[R.A. Youngblood]

I'm sorry for your loss, my both grandpas died, if that reliefs you a little bit.
I didn't know it was about it till i read the end, it was unexpected and tragic.
I like the way you expressed your feelings through this. Be well.
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[Laura Maidah]

Seriously good. Paranoid mood. Cryptic. Startling finish.

[Maan]

To be very honest, cutting the manners part, I don't feel sorry people's death, they are just never ours if we think deep about it. They are never ours, they belong to the place where they are, they are God's and he's having them all. You just can't be sorry for the nature and happening of it. Any ways I appreciate you wrote your feelings about him, and everything you are experiencing. LOSS, no loss is greater than the loss of your own self. Keep yourself strong my friend, strong not cold hearted. Keep writing and keep sharing. .

[That_Girl]

Wow... the ending was... unexpected. But I love this all the same. You are a fantastic writer. Keep it up!

He's your second you.... watching over....
Just try to relax and let him be there.

Wonderfully worked out here. Compliments!

E.L.

[Marie]

THis is quite something...all the time I thought Mick was a real person...not quite the best friend for you to have...

[GunMetal]

This was definitely a shock. Reading your tags gave away the twist that he might not actually be there, but the image you used to pull it off was grotesque, and I'd even say frightening. You are always an interesting read.

[w]

Thank you very much.

[Corset]

amazing twist ending, chilling even, I can't even imagine...wow, very powerful.

[Destinyxi]

Alright I was NOT expecting that ending, the beginning of the poem was sweet, the middle was a bit...uncomfortable, and the end was tragic. Pulled out all the emotions in me. Good write!