MERE XXII

I invited you to come over as you pass-by.
More than three pages had already been tear off.
I'm glad that you're still there.
Even though sometimes I have to work,
It's so relaxing to see you as I return home.
Our mind-blowing chat after the sun had set makes me sleep and ends with
The soundless giggles and silent laughs as the sun rises wakes me up.
Don't be shocked if I treat you this way,
Because you're my guest in this luxury penthouse.
Many have been here, they're also treated the same way,
But they chose to stay in other room and it saddened me so,
And some of them were locked in the dungeon.
Well you're in penthouse, am I also there
Or still merely knocking at you door?

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice poem, I really like the ending three lines.

[lady france]

the oxymoron and the paradox makes piece a piece...great job
i think seanne you're also in his/her penthouse, d'you know that the person you take off your mind is the same person who is thinking of you..just be patient time will come that you'll be in the same penthouse.

this is really best poem i've ever read, the images and how it enters my occipital lobe,wow, more than 3 pages, i got it..i remember your dungeon piece..

"It's so relaxing to see you as I return home" when you start to daydream after the busy hours of work and play'..


goddam great!!!

[Seanne Tholltree]

oh thank you that you understand my hidden emotion,,right now i'm really depressed idk why,,it's like something bump my head i need someone to talk to..can you? i'll just message you

[Coyote Poetry]

"Well you're in penthouse, am I also there
Or still merely knocking at you door?"
You can be surprise by some host. A interesting poem. Penthouse and dungeon in the same poem and making the poem work. I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Seanne Tholltree]

thanks :)

[puch]

wow! nice poem of yours...keep it up seanne

[MoriartyMesa]

The spoken words, the halts, this is another piece i would say,

DO THIS ON STAGE!

it is that strong.

[Seanne Tholltree]

thank you for the interpretation..