Oh, Lover

Summer ended and I needed more-

After you had put out of my misery,

It was something I loathed you for.

 

I was owed an explanation,

As to why I was even in that state;

But you left me screaming in anticipation.

 

I tried to let my feelings just...

Parachute downward with the leaves,

And I found myself in bitter disgust.

 

Midwinter brought boredom;

My mind wondered elsewhere,

Desperately hoping for at least one.

 

Maybe that one Finnish guy,

Or Tibetan girl,

Or the one that didn’t lie.

 

Just as your late explanation rolls in,

Someone new radiates possibility;

Something I will never let you win.

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Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I like the rhyming , not bad and i really didn't notice it because of the subject you are writing about ...
I like it and it is a little mysterious .. seems someone left without regard or a goodbye .. now the person
will try to explain and too bad ..someone new radiates possibility .. like that line ..something I'll never let you win .. nice poem and easy flow ..

Chloe
xoxo

[R. L. Ambar]

There is something odd about this piece, and i am not sure what it is, nor am i sure if it is good, or bad. I like it, but something about just seems...cold, i spose.

Love the bit:
I tried to let my feelings just...
parachute downward with the leaves,
And I found myself in bitter disgust.

#_#

Rocher

[HeavensAngel]

Thanks for stopping by, it was intentionally done.

Just as your late explanation rolls in
Someone new radiates possibility.
Something I'll will never let you win

I sense anger and hurt in these lines. Maybe the other person feels the same way you feel. Betrayed, circumstances have a way of duplicating itself. Nice poem.

[lots fo love ♥]

it was very well written. i loved it

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

i like the flow it adds depth and complexity to this write you have good tallent and great expressions. well done!

[quiet_nomad]

A nice piece, but hard to understand, I do get the sense of anger from the hurt of being pushed away by someone you loved. as you say this field is new to you, keep trying, when it becomes easier, then learn a different approach, try not to rhyme. Keep your resolve and keep trying.