The Breaking Walls

It is about a woman who discovers the depths of her failed marriage and tries taking her life..

These walls are closing on me
They hold stories untold,
Everytime you werent here
And the food turned cold.

These walls were there
When i was close to taking my life,
When your love called and i picked up
Who am i even? Just your wife.

My vein remins cut
There is blood on these faithfull walls
They have seen me crying and eat my chocolates
See everytime my hope falls.

Ignore my calls, ignore my pleads
Will you even ignore mmy dead body?
When my little daughter knows the truth
How will you face her, daddy?

Don't try to hold my limp hand
My cold lifeless eyes will scare you away,
My blood hs stained your favourite carpet
Atleast some prive you had to pay.

The walls turn blurry
I am fading away,
Tell my baby to not be scared
Mommy will always stay.

Tell my mother i loved her
Tell my father to stay brave,
Enscribe a deep fancy quote
Decorate it on my grave.

A dry laughter escapes my parched lips
As i remember the time you said you loved me,
Those sparkling eyes, promises and the rings
Faking love should be considered a felony.

My knees buckled down and i fall
My body weak, pale and cold,
As beloved death envelopes me
There goes the promis to together grow old.

Darkness covers me as i go
And i wish not to haunt you ,
Cause you were the one for me
I just wish i was too.

Author's Note

I relly appreciate all your comments, do let me know what you think about it! Its my first poem on this, please be honest.

Reviews

[Persephone Blum]

I agree, faking love should be a felony! Only thing I can think of is in the last line. I think swapping out "too" with "for you" you would work better rhythm-wise. Of course, if the intent of that line was her stating that she wished she could be the only person she needed, then you shouldn't change it. But well written, very good imagery. I especially like the part about "faithful walls". Makes me feel like she had found comfort in the home until this point.

[everythingdoesn'trhyme]

Everything about this poem seems so deep and interesting, the poet has got so much calibre and talent. Hope to see her strike big in the near future.(Maybe she will remember this small reviewer. :p). Everything.

[Coyote Poetry]

Heartbreak comes when love does not.
"Darkness covers me as i go
And i wish not to haunt you ,
Cause you were the one for me
I just wish i was too."
Love is never fair. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[SejalParnami]

I am glad you liked it!
Love is never fair, it is not supposed to be.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right. Life like to make us earn our victories.