Hey, heartbreaker!

Hey, heartbreaker!

A Poem by Blue
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Thank you...

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Hey, heartbreaker,

thank you for your attention.

I must have been the loveliest

in the entire population

that you chose to practice

your mastered art on me.

Flirtation 101:

Topic? Treachery.

 

Thank you for your flatteries.

It’s so generous of you

to exaggerate my beauty,

tell me, what else is new?

Drop the lousy lines

a lover has to tell.

In case you haven’t heard,

liars rot in hell.

 

Thank you for your poems,

I said I like them so.

But honey, I was joking.

Did you not even know?

Careless comma splices

and awful spelling errors.

Why are you even one

of world’s published authors?

 

Hey, heartbreaker,

thank you for your lies.

You are a living proof

that devils do disguise.

I could have kicked your balls

to deprive you pleasures in bed.

But see, I’ve always cared for you

so I wrote this poem instead.

© 2014 Blue


Author's Note

Blue
See the original link: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/arzeljoy_blu/1288967/

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A quite masterful, strident piece of poetry, yet penned with pleasing and purposeful effect !

If he did not get the message before....He certainly has now ! Superb emotion throughout, splendid indeed!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Tom!
Great occasional punches that you throw.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Dear Arzel Joy,

Hello again. I saw this in my newsfeed and thought I might take a look at what you have here.

This was probably supposed to be full of anger. I felt that emanating from this piece. The first stanza especially highlights how you feel because while keeping a rhythm going, you had made it clear this person was quite deceitful. You definitely got your point across with these two lines, "your mastered art on me./Flirtation 101: Topic? Treachery."

I thought the second stanza flowed pretty well too. I believe a "the" in between "of" and "world's." I know it was supposed to be angry, but I kind of chuckled.

The third stanza was great as well. I especially loved these lines, "Hey, heartbreaker/thank you for your lies/You are a living proof that devils do disguise."

I had to put this in my library and I must say I'm sorry this happened to you. I hope you find a much more deserving person.

I say well done.

95/100

Sincerely JazzSoulKeke,

God bless

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Jazz! You are really good at giving reviews.
Whoever this guy was , he was left in no doubt how you felt!

The last stanza was the best for me, the last four lines especially.

Well written and well read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Sam!
Enjoyed your words...entertaining and nicely penned...Rose:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Thank you, Rose. I missed you and your works.
THe 'conversational poem really does`work rater well. I think we all get your point!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the compliment, Astri.
no fury like the woman scorned ... great ending lines!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Blue

10 Years Ago

Eddie Davis mentioned that same line as a response to this poem, too. Thank you, Einstein.

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