Forever

Forever

A Poem by Blue
"

a word overused

"

"Forever..."

a word overused
a word misunderstood

It is but a moment
not longer than it should.



"Forever..."

has been heard
in lifetimes before

It lost its glitter--
a treasure no more.


"Forever..."

said they
in the heat of romance

empty, nothing
desperate call for chance



"Forever..."

said he
my lover, only one

I woke up one day
and found him gone.



"Forever..."

a word he overused
a word I misunderstood

It is but a moment
not longer than it should.




© 2014 Blue



Author's Note

Blue
Who hasn't used it?
Who hasn't believed it?

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Well done and thoughtful poetic commentary on our use of certain words.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Rutherford!
Ooh...this poem has made an quite an impression on me - FOREVER! (just kidding). No, in all seriousness, it has; I think "forever" is one of those many words we tend to overuse, like "always," "never," "love," and "hate."

Although when I say I love a poem, at least, I really do! I've gotten a lot out of this one; it has so much depth and truth to it. The "It is but a moment, not longer than it should," is so simple, yet extremely profound. And each of the short stanzas give the reader a chance to breathe and consider what they are reading.

As Landred said below, I think we writers *do* need to be true to our word, most of all. If we are writing from the heart, so to speak, that's where our deepest and best work comes from. Though the word "forever" may have lost its glitter, it's up to us to find new words to express what we want to say, and create art that tells the truth.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

You're welcome, Arzel! I do my best to write in-depth, detailed reviews. I think they're more mean.. read more
Blue

3 Years Ago

I wish I could elaborate my reviews more but given my busy schedule and oceans of RRs, I just hurry .. read more
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

Thanks again! It's fun reading through them.
Forever gone? Some good thoughts hear on the broken promises of forever. This poem has actually sparked another in me. Come by a check it out.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Mark!
Michael G. Smith

3 Years Ago

Mark? Who are thinking about, lol? This poem sparked me to write, so thank you.
Blue

3 Years Ago

Hahaha! My mistake! I was absent-minded last night, I didn't know what I was typing! ;) Thanks, Mike.. read more
Forever is a misused, abused word. Like " She takes forever in the shower." This is a good poem that didn't take forever to read

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Man, you are freaking hilarious. Keep the jokes coming! :) Thank you.
Like the use of a strict structure, a bit oulipüo, that forces the poet here to keep on the theme !

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Leslie!
I am afraid that I have used that word a time or two in the past. But this is a powerful piece and it deserves recognition for what it is. A very good piece. I am proud to have read it and you are very talented in writing it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Donald, thanks for believing in me. :)
Donald

3 Years Ago

I wish more people would write the way they feel, then maybe there would be less misunderstanding in.. read more
Blue

3 Years Ago

Ohh, nice insights. :)
Ahh yes to both questions. I've said it a few times myself. Of course I meant it at the time but, well things happen and words are sometimes just words.

As for the poem, I remember I wrote something in almost the same format, scattered and sad to say you've done a better job than I did haha oh well that's okay :p I loved the flow of this piece and just simply writing it this way creates an impact that captures emotion. Good job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Well, what's the title of your poem? I'll look it up and see for myself. :)
topsyturvy

3 Years Ago

Loneliness ain't the cure :) that's the title of my poem :p
This is a great read. I think most people know the feeling. Glad you posted :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Twizzier!
When we are young, we believe in the promise of forever... As we get older, we learn that forever proves itself day by day... Well done, Arzel! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

I love that phrase "forever proves itself day by day". Thank you so much, Rita!
I like this piece, although I almost feel like each is a poem onto itself.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Blue

3 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, KL.

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