Mutual Surrender

hmmmm

I lust after the geometry of your being,

poised on top of me to explore,

like a birthday present waiting to be

u n w r a p p e d...

I pull you closer to me,

closer than the spaces of our kisses,

defying distance dividing the contours of our flesh

until we become

consumed with the fire void of chaste intentions,

slaves to the urgency of the moment

...and y-yesss

let's pour out our words of love into this feverish motion,

unrestricted by rhythm,

unbounded by time--

until we lose ourselves

and find ourselves

in each other

collapsed. . . . . . .in mutual surrender

Author's Note

Okay, it's been quite a long time since I last wrote a poem. Unlike before when I could write nonstop, this one took ages. Any comments would be welcome. :)

Reviews

[DrD]

It may have taken ages, but it will also be remembered for ages. I love your passion and eloquence of expression. There are times when words convey more than meaning and this is one. I was enraptured by the urgency of this writing and enjoyed it tremendously. Extremely well done.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
Sensual poetic beauty!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

I have to admit i'm not one for lustful poems but this one had limits but you displayed it perfectly I love this! Well well done :)

[SANDEEP SHETTY]

Its just great azrel...i liked this burning sense of emotions....

[Maskedthoughts]

Once i started reading I couldn't;t stop! What a great poem, I loved the imagery and just everything. Great write!

[BlackHeart]

I can see that you took your time on this poem and thought about it. You did a great job, and a lot of great writers take their time when writing so that they can think about the perfect word. You did an amazing job, thank you for sharing your work.

[Winchester Saltgunner]

just let your mind go free, like in this one, don't let your thoughts surrender to what society wants! write what you feel look deep down and don't think about it too hard just let your thoughts flow like in this amazing poem!

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Such a passionate, enticing read: a powerful grip of love. I really liked it, and I can see the results of the time you put into this poem. Wonderful work!

[Sasha]

Aww...that was so beautiful. Love the words you used in this poem. Very well done!

[Twizzler]

Another beautiful poem :)