Broken

Behind the smoke
Behind the act,
I'm just a little broke
Just a little cracked.
The smiles fake
pulled up by stings,
And the laughs I make
Are hollow as rings.
Yes I am flawed,
But it doesn't mean weak
Nor does it mean fraud,
Or a freak.

Reviews

[Ossicedia]

Such a short poem but so many simple words can mean so much more than they seem. This is absolutely beautiful. Great job

[Sam]

Thank you!!!

[Mr.Writer]

This is emotional and beautiful! You've conveyed lots of emotion and flowed it really well :)
Great job!

[Sam]

Thank you!!!

[writ rajat]

I think you got the idea of the poem from rock climbing nice one

[Sam]

Hahaha :p thanks!!

[ImSJ]

Sam, is this true? Is it personal? Why? Are you saying this is me but this is all you get? Is this a constant in your life? Or just on Thursdays? Can you expand it? Can you take us behind the scenes? We've all felt this way sometime in our lives but can you take this idea from the personal and relate it universally? And draw conclusions for us to think about?

[Sam]

Yes it is personal, and it's rather constant.
I will certainly try to expand it, and make universal not just personal. I'll also try to draw conclusions, but I don't know how that might work out 😐 If you have any advice, or tips on trying these things I would certainly enjoy them!!

[ImSJ]

My sister's cat is named Broken. She was wandering around homeless and a little beat up when she showed up on their doorstep. Now she has a warm place to sleep, plenty of food, and someone to love her. Also a BIG dog for a friend. Maybe she was a little like the person in the poem.

[Zoya]

I like the meaning behind this...especially the last four lines. We all can relate to it. It's a nice write. Keep writing!

[Sam]

Thank you!!

[Zoya]

No problem.