Winter and rain

Head to toes
Your body was soaked,
And you stood
Looking into the rain.
Over your head hung
Your black coat,
And your body shook
With immense pain.
They only light that I found
Was the fires you lit
From the feelings you'd
Shoved down your throat.
But that you need help
You'd never admit,
You'd rather fall
Then help to float.
The flames reflect,
All the words never said.
All the moments
You swallowed your thoughts.
Your hands hold your heart
That was torn to shreds
From the feelings
You'd kept bottled up.
You scream at the sky
Your eyes tearing up,
You keep asking "why?"

I called out your name
To tell you I'm here,
But, it was lost in the storm
Of your winter and rain.

Author's Note

What did you think of it as a whole?

Reviews

[ImSJ]

Yep. I had a gf like this several years ago. Tragic she was. Dramatic she was. Frustrating she was. As you may guess it ended badly. The poem mirrors that relationship too accurately. Well done, Sam.

[Sam]

Thank you!!

[Mr.Writer]

I like this poem! It flows well most of the time, but some parts can be a bit confusing.
"From the feelings you'd
Shoved down your throat."
I felt like this part can be changed a bit :)
As a whole, it's really well done!

[Sam]

Ya I had problems trying to get it to flow, and be understandable. :( thank you for the review!!!

[Mr.Writer]

No problem! :)

[Mr.Writer]

I really liked it overall