Ghost

Ghost

A Poem by Sam

The walls all creak
And the violent wind howls
The outside is dark and bleak Illumed by the eyes of owls
Tonight's the night
The night they will come.
There's no way I can fight,
In their presence I grow numb.
From my past
the shadows haunt me
they'll stay till night's passed
Whilst giggling with maniacal glee.

© 2017 Sam



Author's Note

Sam
What did you think of it as a whole. Did it need any changes? (I still haven't finished this poem yet, but any advice you have on it is greatly appreciated!)

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"Illumed" is a shorter, more poetic way of saying "illuminated" and "There's no way I can fight" (no "that")....those notes help the musicality. This poem is otherwise enjoyably gripping. Well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Sam

3 Months Ago

Thank you!
Sam

3 Months Ago

As usual your advice is very helpful!!!
emipoemi

3 Months Ago

glad I could be of service.
Why is Outside capitalized? Needs some more work but could turn out better. Sub "walls" for "boards"? Rolls by better. Right? "Illuminated by the eyes of owls" is a good line. What's so special about this night? What happened in the past? Why are the shadows that the speaker can't fight just giggling?

Posted 3 Months Ago


Sam

3 Months Ago

Thanks for the tips! This poem was originaly a joke for a friend. That I had decided to post, so It'.. read more
My, I think it's very well done Sam!
I enjoyed the rhymes and I felt really engaged while reading this!
Keep it up!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Sam

3 Months Ago

Thank you!

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Hi my name is M. Sam Teague every just calls Sam. I'm a student by day and a writer by... well whenever I get time. My hobbies include anything from sitting in bed all day to rock climbing and skiing more..

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