Get back up

Get back up

A Poem by Sam

Just cause you fallen down
Doesn't mean you're broke.
Just cause you cracked your crown
Doesn't mean your a joke.

So if you fall, Get back up,
Rise above where you once where.
Climb past what had you stumped
And past their angry glare;

And once you've risen to the top
You can look at what you've passed,
How many times you wished to stop
But kept on running fast.
You got back up, and crawled along
When the trail was hard to tread.
Now your standing past the throng,
Raise your weary head;
And show them what cause you had
For all that you worked, sweat, bled.

© 2017 Sam



Author's Note

Sam
What did you think of the last two lines, where they unnecessary?

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Great poem, last 2 lines fit perfect with poem, many fall without rising to where they once was, great job inspiring aswell as great and easy to read well done.....!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Sam

2 Months Ago

Thank you!
Such an engaging, powerful and positive poem Senya! The ryhmes kept us hooked and wanting to read more along with some reality as well!
Well done, keep it up :))

Posted 2 Months Ago


Sam

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
Mr.Writer

2 Months Ago

No problem Senya :)
This is a good empowering poem. Really moves the reader, and encourages them to carry on. Stanza 2 has musicality issues (and so does Stanza 1 Line 3, but that one just needs a "have" inserted in order to be fixed). And concerning the last two lines....they're good, but they don't quite land on a good strong beat to merit an ending, as far as the musicality is concerned. That's all. This is really good overall. Well done!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Sam

2 Months Ago

Thank you, your tips are greatly appreciated!

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Hi my name is M. Sam Teague every just calls Sam. I'm a student by day and a writer by... well whenever I get time. My hobbies include anything from sitting in bed all day to rock climbing and skiing more..

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