They

They

A Poem by Senzieser
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I wrote this. :/ What more do you want me to say?

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They met on a writing site.

 

They talked all day and night

 

He asked her out, she said no.

 

Then he asked her again, and no.

 

Finally the girl said yes, and I’m sure

 

They dated for a while. Just a big pile.

 

He showed her his love, told her his fears

 

His wishes, his dreams and tears.

 

She hated him but loved some other

 

He was right down rude and stubborn

 

Well she dated the guy, she did another

 

Neither guy knew the other must suffer

 

Then one day she called her true lover

 

I’m sorry to say, I think we are way over

 

The guy felt his heart, and she smiled

 

I’m with someone better, she nattered

 

She gave her second lover her love

 

While the first still weeps from her shove

It’s been over a year, if not two

 

She’s still with her lover, oh brother.

 

The one guy is fine, but you can see him crying

 

She has no self respect, or is she just incompetent

© 2010 Senzieser


Author's Note

Senzieser
Not sure what to tell you :/

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This is a journey through lack of esteem, it seems, poignantly versed and I like the form a lot and the pace to this is excellent! xx

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a very good expressional piece Frank

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I value and regard your feelings and expression. Remember one thing if u can't change others, change yourself or change the way.Great write. Keep it up.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

:) *hugs you* Thanks, Sis.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved this. It was great. Well...she doesn't have self respect and she is incompetent. I feel bad for the guy....well thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Senzieser

Ohio Pike, Cincinnati, OH



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My name is Senzieser (Sin-z-i-sir), I am not really into writing, but I was told my writings were really good so I figured I'd join this site my brother showed me. I joined this site in 2008 and I.. more..

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