Symphonie de mon Coeur

Mon amour.

Symphonie de mon Coeur

by alice oiseau

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Play the strings of my heart.

Light rhythm of dulcet tones,

of butterflies, of daffodils.

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Euphonic melodies you play

ever so gently,

Serenaded by you

ever so tenderly.

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The octave continues.

Incessant bliss and

whirls of fantasia

as your beautiful whispers strum

my aeolian harp.

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Sunset's tempos

Pulsing through my soul,

Red dress and quick paced tangos.

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Luna's lullaby of ballads

where swans take flight,

Blue gown and slow waltzes of the night.

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Stars go blue,

A symphony born from you.

Adagio of romance,

Now savor the cadence.

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When it ends,

play it again...

 

 

 

Author's Note

Romance. Alice style.
Old poem.

Reviews

[Markymark]

My favorite stanza is the third:

The octave continues.
Incessant bliss and
whirls of fantasia
as your beautiful whispers strum
my aeolian harp.

My reason: It follows the slow meter of the two verses preceding it. It is tender, as a whisper blown across the strings, can still cause music.

Stanza four comes unexpectedly with a dance metaphor versus musical terminology and adds an element of movement�. Faster

Stanza five slows again with another dress and dance metaphor..this time the waltz.
Four and five also have sunset and night references.
At first read, four and five seem misplaced�but a more careful read leaves them be�as Music and dance are sisters of one another.

You chose adiago versus the slower larghetto. Hmmm unless you were still talking of dance (pas de deux).

Although likely unintentional�..this piece mocks the love-making ritual of slow foreplay, sweet-nothings and whispers into physical love with crescendo's and different dances, into blissful rises to euphoric places, and finally the afterglow and�.play it again.
I say this because I have read several poems lately in the caf� which also metaphorize the playing of music with love-making.

Since you love things French (ha ha) I'm surprised you didn't pick a Non-rhyming, (did I say non-rhyming?) French form to really ice it with sweetness.

Sorry to write a novel, But I wanted to thank you for your heart and soul.

Lovely and very, very romantic.

Markymark

[Clockwork]

Well I would say that this is romantic. It makes you want to sing as it is read. Good images, and well formed. The picture at the start is a nice touch as well.